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Talk about your country. You should say: - what cities have the most number of tourists - what your advice is for someone planning to visit your country- what could be done to attract more number of tourists - and explain what changes you think your country v.1

Talk about your country. You should say: - what cities have the most number of tourists - what your advice is for someone planning to visit your country- what could be done to attract more number of tourists - and explain what changes you think your country v. 1
Wearing uniforms has been on trend always. It is observed that many organizations expect from their employees to wear company uniform which is beneficial in terms of promoting the company brand and it also shows discipline at work environment. However, there are few drawbacks too which will be explained in the following paragraphs. To commence with the advantages of wearing uniforms at work, the predominant one is promotion of the branding, which is the most imperative role in any company’s growth. For instance, employees finish their job and goes out then everyone can see the logo and name of the company, which is itself an advertisement. Moreover, when workers wear the uniform, they feel disciplined and it gives a sense of uniformity which creates positive environment at work. Thus, it helps in growing organizations. Nevertheless, there are some disadvantages of wearing uniforms. Firstly, employees loses their personal identity when they wear the same outfit every day. For example, an Airline has a dress code for its employees and they are bound to wear irrespective of their personal interests for clothes. Consequently, they would not be able to live their life freely. Secondly, it adds an additional cost to the company as they provide uniforms to all its employees and it could be a never ending expense due to hiring new employees and maintaining the existing ones. In conclusion, although wearing same uniform shows unity amongst employees as well as free advertisement of the company brands, it also considered to have an impact on personal identification and costing a lot of money to the industries.
Wearing
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uniforms
has been on trend always. It
is observed
that
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many
organizations
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expect
from their
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employees
to
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wear
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company
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uniform
which is beneficial in terms of promoting the
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company
brand and it
also
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shows
discipline at work environment.
However
, there are few drawbacks too which will be
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explained
in the following paragraphs.

To commence with the advantages of wearing
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uniforms
at work, the predominant one is promotion of the branding, which is the most imperative role in any
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company’s
growth.
For instance
,
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employees
finish their job and goes out then everyone can
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see
the logo and name of the
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company
, which is itself an advertisement.
Moreover
, when workers
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wear
the
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uniform
, they feel disciplined and it gives a sense of uniformity which creates
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
environment at work.
Thus
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in growing organizations.

Nevertheless
, there are
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some
disadvantages of wearing
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uniforms
.
Firstly
,
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employees
loses their personal identity when they
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wear
the same outfit every day.
For example
, an Airline has a dress code for its
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employees and
they
are bound
to
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wear
irrespective of their personal
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interests for
clothes.
Consequently
, they would not be able to
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live
their life
freely
.
Secondly
, it
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adds an additional cost
to the
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company
as they provide
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uniforms
to all its
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employees
and it could be a never ending expense due to hiring new
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employees
and maintaining the existing ones.

In conclusion
, although wearing same
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uniform
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
unity amongst
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employees
as well
as free
The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?
advertisement of
the
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company
brands, it
also
considered to have an impact on personal identification and costing
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a lot of
money to the industries.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Talk about your country. You should say: - what cities have the most number of tourists - what your advice is for someone planning to visit your country- what could be done to attract more number of tourists - and explain what changes you think your country v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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