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Talk about an important goal in your life and what steps have you taken to reach it? Include details and examples to support your answer. v.1

Talk about an important goal in your life and what steps have you taken to reach it? Include details and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Traffic congestion has been considered one of the alarming issues of many metropolises in the world. This essay will discuss and present some solutions should be considered to tackle the phenomenon. There are some factors which cause congestion. Firstly, people prefer using their private vehicles instead of public transport which is attributed to the sheer weight of traffic. When compared to the two things mentioned above, these people are likely to choose the former since they may save their time and can arrive at any destinations - one of the perks of using private transport. However, it is the main factor that caused congestion because the road would be overloaded [with] private vehicles during peak hours when too many people want to move at the same time. Additionally, those who live in the outskirts tend to migrate and work in major cities. This may lead to overdevelopment in these municipalities where the road system is inadequate as well as overcrowded and therefore it can cause traffic congestion. To tackle this problem, there are several solutions that governments could take to solve. Firstly, governments can encourage people to travel by public transport such as trains or buses because a shift from private to public transport would tremendously alleviate this problem. For example, they can use income taxes for creating free travel in public transport which can reduce a mass number of vehicles. As a result, they can ease traffic congestion. Secondly, many people believe that better road quality may curb traffic jams. Governments should expand roads and building more highways to solve the problems of overloaded vehicles. Another method in order to mitigate the pressure on many metropolises is that by moving workplaces and universities to rural areas. In conclusion, various measures can be taken by governments to weather the congestion problem which is a chronic problem in many big cities.
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Traffic
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congestion
has
been considered
one of the alarming issues of
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many
metropolises in the world. This essay will discuss and present
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some
solutions should
be considered
to tackle the phenomenon.

There are
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some
factors which cause
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congestion
.
Firstly
,
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people
prefer using their
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private
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vehicles
instead
of
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public
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transport
which
is attributed
to the sheer weight of
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traffic
. When compared to the two things mentioned above, these
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people
are likely to choose the former since they may save their time and can arrive at any destinations
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-
one of the perks of using
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private
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transport
.
However
, it is the main factor that caused
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congestion
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because
the
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road
would
be overloaded
[with]
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private
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vehicles
during peak hours when too
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many
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people
want to
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move
at the same time.
Additionally
, those who
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live
in the outskirts tend to migrate and work in major cities. This may lead to
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overdevelopment
in these municipalities where the
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road
system is inadequate
as well
as overcrowded and
therefore
it can cause
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traffic
congestion.

To tackle this
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problem
, there are several solutions that
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governments
could take to solve.
Firstly
,
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governments
can encourage
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people
to travel by
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public
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transport
such as trains or buses
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because
a shift from
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private
to
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public
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transport
would
tremendously
alleviate this
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problem
.
For example
, they can
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use
income taxes for creating free travel in
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public
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transport
which can
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reduce
a mass number of
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vehicles
.
As a result
, they can
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ease
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traffic
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congestion
.
Secondly
,
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many
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people
believe that better
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road
quality may curb
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traffic
jams.
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Governments
should expand
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roads
and building more highways to solve the
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problems
of overloaded
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vehicles
. Another method in order to mitigate the pressure on
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many
metropolises is that by moving workplaces and universities to rural areas.

In conclusion
, various measures can
be taken
by
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governments
to weather the
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congestion
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problem
which is a chronic
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problem
in
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many
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big
cities.
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IELTS essay Talk about an important goal in your life and what steps have you taken to reach it? Include details and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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