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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v.11

Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v. 11
Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree? Influence of social networking sites on general public has long been debated. While a significant number of people visualise Facebook as a menace to the humans, from my point of view, one should not alienate the progressive impact of community networking sites on humanity in general. Therefore, pro and cons of Facebook for a civil community are required to be comprehended in tandem with each other. The critics of these websites point out to the trend that people are prone to get addicted to these applications and consequently losing a significant amount of their productive time. In addition, the protestors also project that these applications give an unprecedented and unrestricted access of information and content to anyone at one’s disposal which otherwise may be restricted to a certain age or contrary to one’s own community guidelines. However, the old phrase of man is a social animal still holds its true essence. Social networking sites have been using this basic evolutionary human characteristics to bring people and communities closer to each other than ever before. Not only these sites are making cultural exchanges between us more accessible, but also providing a conducive platform for business to flourish across the globe. Companies ranging from a multi-nationals to a small town self-employed person is booming on the lower cost-high impact marketing model which these sites bring to the table. In conclusion, these social websites have made the population more closes knit than earlier. While these sites do have certain adverse impacts on society as a consequence of their vast public reach, nevertheless we cannot isolate the ground breaking progress of our civilization that these sites have been able to offer to us.
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networking
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sites
(such as Facebook) have had a huge
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negative
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impact
on both individuals and society. To what extent do you
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agree
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people
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impact
of
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community
networking
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sites
on humanity
in general
.
Therefore
, pro and cons of Facebook for a civil
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community
are required
to
be comprehended
in tandem with each other.

The critics of these websites point out to the trend that
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people
are prone to
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get
addicted to these applications and
consequently
losing a significant amount of their productive time.
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also
project that these applications give an unprecedented and unrestricted access of information and content to anyone at one’s disposal which
otherwise
may
be restricted
to a certain age or contrary to one’s
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community
guidelines.

However
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have been using this basic evolutionary human characteristics to bring
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and
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communities
closer to each other than ever
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before
. Not
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only
these
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sites
are making cultural exchanges between us more accessible,
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but
also
providing a conducive platform for business to flourish across the globe.
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Companies
ranging from a multi-nationals to a
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small
town self-employed person is booming on the lower cost-high
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impact
marketing model which these
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sites
bring to the table.

In conclusion
, these
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social
websites have made the population more closes knit than earlier. While these
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sites
do have certain adverse
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impacts
on society as a consequence of their vast public reach,
nevertheless
we cannot isolate the ground breaking progress of our civilization that these
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sites
have been able to offer to us.
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IELTS essay Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions. v. 11

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
306 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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