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In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v.2

In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v. 2
Nowadays, the Internet plays a key role in our daily life. Most of us might think it helps to connect and stay in touch with people all around the world, but it also might be the reason for people not socializing. Let us see how the internet helps us to stay connected with one another, and also we will see its drawbacks in our regular life. By using the internet, we can connect with friends and family without meeting physically. For example, if I am living in other states, then I can't meet my friends and relatives frequently like as I stay in native place. So, the internet helps us to talk, chat, and even see them whenever we want. It really eases our mind. Now, we can see there are so many applications like Facebook, Whatsapp, and Skype. Those helps to reconnect our old friends too. Finally, it has its own side effects like addiction, which makes us to not move from the computer. Due to this, we spend most of the time on the computer and will not show any interest on other activities like sports, spending time with family and also friends which will be a great impact on our social life. I mostly agree with the above statement that it helps us to stay connected with people all around the world and I partially agree that it makes us to not socialize. However, if we use it with limits, we can be great at connecting people all around the world and also we can have time with our surrounding people.
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IELTS essay In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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