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Some people like to watch action movies. Others prefer watching comedies. Which type of movie do you prefer and why? v.1

Some people like to watch action movies. Others prefer watching comedies. Which type of movie do you prefer and why? v. 1
Traffic makes life hell. Nowadays, most of the families own one or more cars, which will be the main cause of traffic in cities. I agree that many private cars on the road means more traffic, but I disagree that private cars banning from the city centre. Government can encourage the public to use a mass transportation like car pooling, trains, and busses. For example, if we have neighbours who work in a same company or some other company which is nearby, then we can use any one of their cars to reach destination. So, it helps to reduce the number of cars on the road which ultimately leads to the less traffic when everybody thinks like that. Finally, the Government should provide public transportation like busses and trains more frequently. In addition to that, they should increase the number of transportations according to public requirement as well as they maintain it regularly. So, people like to use public transportation, which will be cheap and comfortable. For example, spending money on buying cars is more expensive than using public transportation and it will be more comfortable and relaxing if we just sit instead of driving our own car. Banishing private cars will not be a reasonable act on public because they may get any emergency when they cannot get the public transportation as needed. Moreover, the government cannot just take the decision on behalf of everybody without their concern which will lead to further problems. Instead of that, if government educates public to use mass transportation like car pooling, busses and cars, which ultimately solves the problem of traffic in city centres.
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traffic
in cities. I
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private
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on the road means more
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,
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cars
banning from the city
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centre
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Government
can encourage the
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public
to
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use
a mass
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transportation
like
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car
pooling, trains, and busses.
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, if we have
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neighbours
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to reach destination.
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when everybody
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thinks
like that.

Finally
, the
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should provide
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public
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transportation
like busses and trains more
frequently
.
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to that, they should increase the number of
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transportations
according to
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requirement
as well
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regularly
.
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,
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like to
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public
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transportation
, which will be
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cheap
and comfortable.
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, spending money on buying
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cars
is more expensive than using
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public
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transportation
and it will be more comfortable and relaxing if we
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just
sit
instead
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car.

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any emergency when they cannot
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the
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public
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transportation
as needed.
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, the
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government
cannot
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take the decision on behalf of everybody without their concern which will lead to
further
problems.
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of that, if
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government
educates
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public
to
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mass
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transportation
like
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car
pooling, busses and
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cars
, which
ultimately
solves the problem of
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traffic
in city
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centres
.
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IELTS essay Some people like to watch action movies. Others prefer watching comedies. Which type of movie do you prefer and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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