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37. Everyone has a goal to fulfill. What’s your goal and explain why you want tofulfill this goal. Please include specific examples and details in yourexplanation. v.1

37. Everyone has a goal to fulfill. What’s your goal and explain why you want tofulfill this goal. Please include specific examples and details in yourexplanation. v. 1
Tourist attractions are a part of the country's economy. More the number of visitors, the more income that the country will have which is also good for local businesses. Some people argue that foreign visitors should pay more than locals to see the same cultural and famous attractions in a country. This essay will discuss that this perspective is right. Most of the time, outside tourists as compared to local people get more services- tour guides, who can explain more about the site in their own language, priority services or souvenirs. As we know nothing comes free, that's why these service costs are added to the visitor's fees. Localities do not need these kind of services as they are already aware of the place and its information, as a result they do not need to be charged for them. Generally, tourist sites are visited more often by locals than expats which helps to earn money needed to maintain the place and to make the local economy vibrant. If locals are charged as much as visitors then probably, few locals will come to see the place and they will do so less frequently. Therefore, it is important not to charge higher fees from natives. From the above points, we can say that It is fair to charge more money from foreigners than locals to maintain the tourist facilities and keep them economical. In conclusion, local visitors to a tourist spot should be charged less amount, thus removing all hesitation and advocating others to follow suit.
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Tourist
attractions are a part of the country's economy. More the number of
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visitors
, the more income that the country will have which is
also
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good
for
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local
businesses.
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Some
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people
argue that foreign
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visitors
should pay more than
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locals
to
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see
the same cultural and
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famous
attractions in a country. This essay will discuss that this perspective is right.

Most of the time, outside
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tourists
as compared to
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local
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people
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get
more
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services-
tour guides, who can
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explain
more about the site in their
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own
language, priority
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services
or souvenirs. As we know nothing
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comes
free, that's why these
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service
costs are
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added
to the visitor's fees. Localities do not need
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these kind
of
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services
as they are already aware of the place and its information,
as a result
they do not need to
be charged
for them.

Generally
,
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tourist
sites
are visited
more
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often
by
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locals
than expats which
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helps
to earn money needed to maintain the place and to
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make
the
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local
economy vibrant. If
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locals
are charged
as much as
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visitors
then
probably
, few
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locals
will
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come
to
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see
the
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place and
they will do
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so
less
frequently
.
Therefore
, it is
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important
not to charge higher fees from natives.

From the above points, we can say that It is
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fair
to charge more money from foreigners than
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locals
to maintain the
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tourist
facilities and
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keep
them economical.
In conclusion
,
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local
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visitors
to a
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tourist
spot should
be charged
less amount,
thus
removing all hesitation and advocating others to follow suit.
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Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay 37. Everyone has a goal to fulfill. What’s your goal and explain why you want tofulfill this goal. Please include specific examples and details in yourexplanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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