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talk about a problem you have faced, and how you overcame this problem. Include detailes and examples in your answer. v.1

talk about a problem you have faced, and how you overcame this problem. Include detailes and examples in your answer. v. 1
There is currently a contentious argument over whether the traffic and housing issues could be mitigated by changing the location of huge companies, factories and their employees from big cities to the rural areas. In my opinion, I totally agree with this opinion because there would be less number of vehicles on the street and there are more areas for housing construction. To begin with, the main reason why I believe that moving companies, factories and their workers to the rural sites could reduce traffic congestions in large cities is because the number of private vehicles on the street would be significantly decreased. In other words, if a substantial number of people move to the countryside, there would be less number of people transporting on the street. As a result, traffic problems would rarely happen. For example, in my hometown, there are many factories and companies whose workers transport by using private vehicles such as bicycles or motorbikes. Consequently, they significantly contribute to heavy traffic congestions during rush hours. Hence, if there would be no factories and companies, there would be less pressure on traffic in my hometown. Another reason why I support the notion that moving companies, manufactures, and their employees to the countryside could help tackle the housing issues is due to the fact that there are more land sites to build houses for urban citizens. It is also possible to say that people in enormous cities will have enough places to settle down when there are more spaces to erect houses. In conclusion, I completely believe that moving companies, manufactures, and their workers to rural locations would resolve the traffic and housing matters in cities because not only the number of vehicles on urban streets would be significantly plummeted, but also there would be more space to build more houses for urban dwellers. Given this situation, It seems that the government should take some steps to encourage people to move and live in rural locations such as reducing taxes for rural people or subsidising them.
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currently
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traffic
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be mitigated
by changing the location of huge
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companies
,
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factories
and their employees from
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big
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cities
to the
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areas. In my opinion, I
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agree
with this opinion
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vehicles
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street
and there are more areas for housing construction.

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begin
with, the main reason why I believe that moving
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companies
,
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factories
and their workers to the
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rural
sites could
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reduce
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traffic
congestions in large
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cities
is
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because
the
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number
of private
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vehicles
on the
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street
would be
significantly
decreased.
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number
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people
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move
to the countryside, there would be less
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number
of
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people
transporting on the
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street
.
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,
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traffic
problems would rarely happen.
For example
, in my hometown, there are
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factories
and
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companies
whose workers transport by using private
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vehicles
such as bicycles or motorbikes.
Consequently
, they
significantly
contribute to heavy
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traffic
congestions during rush hours.
Hence
, if there would be no
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factories
and
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companies
, there would be less pressure on
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traffic
in my hometown.

Another reason why I support the notion that moving
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companies
, manufactures, and their employees to the countryside could
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help
tackle the housing issues is due to the fact that there are more land sites to build
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houses
for urban citizens. It is
also
possible to say that
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people
in enormous
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cities
will have
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enough
places to settle down when there are more spaces to erect
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houses
.

In conclusion
, I completely believe that moving
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companies
, manufactures, and their workers to
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rural
locations would resolve the
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traffic
and housing matters in
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cities
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because
not
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only
the
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vehicles
on urban
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streets
would be
significantly
plummeted,
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but
also
there would be more space to build more
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houses
for urban dwellers.
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Given
this situation, It seems that the
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government
should take
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some
steps to encourage
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people
to
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move
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in
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locations such as reducing taxes for
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or
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subsidising
them.
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IELTS essay talk about a problem you have faced, and how you overcame this problem. Include detailes and examples in your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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