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Explain how the children's behavior from a trick or treat study supports the central theories of deindividuation v.1

Explain how the children's behavior from a trick or treat study supports the central theories of deindividuation v. 1
That the punishments should be imposed on criminals depending on age group has controversial. Several people argue that the youngsters who break the law should be penalised in the similar method as older. I partly agree with this view. To begin with, the governments should enact the same punishments to resemble crimes regardless of age. First and foremost, imposing the similar way on both the young and adults will decrease the rate of crime, in particular the re-offending level. It is clearly seen that those punishments will act as a deterrent to threat children who have illegal actions, as a result, juvenile will be afraid of penalties and the crime rate will decline. In addition, it is equal to all wrongdoers to be punished the resemble way. The fact shows that if the governments impose the discriminating punishments, young people may take consideration in committing a crime as a normal thing. For example, in Viet Nam, the law about murder is distinguished between youngsters who aged under 18 and adults. This affects negatively on the country's future. On the other hand, there are some reasons to impose the different penalties on different age groups. Firstly, children are not mature enough to aware of whether what they do is legal or illegal. Therefore, the best solution to limit the level of young offenders is to provide them with a better education. For instance, if young people are well-educated and have a good condition or development, they will avoid bad behaviour. Moreover, youngsters should have time to reflect their actions and have a chance to make the fresh start. In order to give juvenile the opportunities, the governments should take into account to impose some laws which are soft on crimes such as corporal punishments or non-custodial sentences to help them have a chance of rehabilitation after committing the crimes. In conclusion, although there are some reasonable causes for implementing the different punishments to the young and adults I strongly believe that it plays an integral part to impose the same penalties to serious crime at all ages so as to decrease the crime rate of a country.
That the
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punishments
should
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on criminals depending on
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age
group has controversial. Several
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people
argue that the youngsters who break the law should be
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penalised
in the similar method as older. I partly
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agree
with this view.

To
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begin
with, the
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governments
should enact the same
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punishments
to resemble
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crimes
regardless of
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age
.
First
and foremost, imposing the similar way on both the
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young
and adults will decrease the rate of
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crime
,
in particular
the re-offending level. It is
clearly
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seen
that those
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punishments
will act as a deterrent to threat children who have illegal actions,
as a result
, juvenile will be afraid of penalties and the
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crime
rate will decline.
In addition
, it is equal to all wrongdoers to
be punished
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the resemble
way. The fact
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shows
that if the
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governments
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impose
the discriminating
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punishments
,
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young
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people
may take consideration in committing a
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crime
as a normal thing.
For example
, in
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Viet
Nam, the law about murder
is distinguished
between youngsters who aged under 18 and adults. This affects
negatively
on the country's future.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
reasons to
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impose
the
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different
penalties on
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different
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age
groups.
Firstly
, children are not mature
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enough
to aware of whether what they do is legal or illegal.
Therefore
, the best solution to limit the level of
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young
offenders is to provide them with a better education.
For instance
, if
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young
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people
are well-educated and have a
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good
condition or development, they will avoid
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bad
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behaviour
.
Moreover
, youngsters should have time to reflect their actions and have a chance to
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make
the fresh
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start
. In order to give juvenile the opportunities, the
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governments
should take into account to
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impose
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some
laws which are soft on
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crimes
such as corporal
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punishments
or non-custodial sentences to
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help
them have a chance of rehabilitation after committing the crimes.

In conclusion
, although there are
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some
reasonable causes for implementing the
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different
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punishments
to the
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young
and adults I
strongly
believe that it plays an integral part to
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impose
the same penalties to serious
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crime
at all
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ages
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so as to
decrease the
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crime
rate of a country.
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IELTS essay Explain how the children's behavior from a trick or treat study supports the central theories of deindividuation v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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