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independent- Tpo 43- Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? •Interrupt and correct the mistake right away. •Wait until v.1

independent- Tpo 43- Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? •Interrupt and correct the mistake right away. •Wait until v. 1
In this fast-paced world, a leader must have many strong leadership qualities to be successful. Some assert that a highly successful leader is one who has innate leadership skills while others refute this idea, believing that the necessary attributes can be gained. On the one hand, those who support inherent skills in terms of leading the masses emphasize that so formidable and uphill is the task of propelling a group towards a goal that it can be done perfectly only by leaders who have a natural aptitude. To elaborate, the only ones who have managed talent are competent to surmount the obstacles in an innovative way and reach their ambitious goals. Furthermore, in directing a group of people towards the aims, having inherently decision-making skills is of paramount importance, which ordinary people lack. Talented leaders are the best decision-makers who can make a deliberate decision irrespective of how difficult the circumstances are. This attribute not only sets a good example for the followers, but it would also inspire confidence and motivate them to do the unthinkable, accelerating attaining the group goal. On the other hand, although possessing talent in leading is deemed to be a contributing factor to success, one can acquire the required skills in terms of management and problem-solving through education. On this side of the debate, proponents believe that academic education may enhance individual capabilities in many areas such as team management, delegation, emotional intelligence, thus, they are given a golden chance to catch up with inborn leaders and even surpass them. Also, to gain respect, it is needed for a leader to have some qualities such as being selfless and morally committed, infusing new energy to the team. There exist many leaders throughout history who were revered by their subordinates owing to their honesty and integrity. Based on the above, it can be concluded that a competent leader must have many distinguishing characteristics that are necessary for achievement, and lack of them may lead to failure. Although having a flair for leading a team plays a prominent role in gaining success, having higher education aids individuals to develop their skills and measure up with those who are supposed to be talented.
In this
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fast
-paced world, a
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leader
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must
have
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many
strong leadership qualities to be successful.
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Some
assert that a
highly
successful
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leader
is one
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who
has innate leadership
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skills
while others refute this
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idea
, believing that the necessary attributes can
be gained
.

On the one hand, those
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who
support inherent
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skills
in terms of leading the masses emphasize that
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so
formidable and uphill is the task of propelling a group towards a goal that it can
be done
perfectly
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only
by
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leaders
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who
have a natural aptitude. To elaborate, the
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only
ones
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who
have managed talent are competent to surmount the obstacles
Consider replacing "in an innovative way" with the adverb for "innovative"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an innovative way
and reach their ambitious goals.
Furthermore
, in directing a group of
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people
towards the aims, having
inherently
decision-making
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skills
is of paramount importance, which ordinary
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people
lack. Talented
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leaders
are the best decision-makers
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who
can
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make
a deliberate decision irrespective of how difficult the circumstances are. This attribute not
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only
sets a
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good
example for the followers,
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but
it would
also
inspire confidence and motivate them to do the unthinkable, accelerating attaining the group goal.

On the other hand
, although possessing talent in leading
is deemed
to be a contributing factor to success, one can acquire the required
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
in terms of management and problem-solving through education. On this side of the debate, proponents believe that academic education may enhance individual capabilities in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
areas such as team management, delegation, emotional intelligence,
thus
, they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a golden chance to catch up with inborn
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leaders
and even surpass them.
Also
, to gain respect, it
is needed
for a
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leader
to have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
qualities such as being selfless and
morally
committed, infusing new energy to the team. There exist
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leaders
throughout history
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
were revered
by their subordinates owing to their honesty and integrity.

Based on the above, it can
be concluded
that a competent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leader
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
distinguishing characteristics that are necessary for achievement, and lack of them may lead to failure. Although having a flair for leading a team plays a prominent role in gaining success, having higher education aids individuals to develop their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
and measure up with those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
are supposed
to
be talented
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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Flora Lewis

IELTS essay independent- Tpo 43- Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? •Interrupt and correct the mistake right away. •Wait until v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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