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Talk about a popular actor, musician, or artist whose work you do not admire. Explain why you do not like this person's work. Use specific details and reasons in your response. v.1

Talk about a popular actor, musician, or artist whose work you do not admire. Explain why you do not like this person's work. Use specific details and reasons in your response. v. 1
Recently it is proved by many scientists and psychology researchers that colours have greater effects on human’s mood. For Some crucial working environment like offices and hospitals, the special concentration must be needed in terms of colour selection. This easement will discuss whether it is true and how much this persuades the ability of job and one’s health. First, I agree with the statement that colours may have some causes on an individual’s mood. Our faces got red when we are angry at something. We feel fresh by when we see greenery nature. The green colour is used to represent the beauty of nature. White and blue colours make us feel safe and peaceful. Orange colour makes our mind active. There are lots of examples in which psychologist and researchers already proved that colours change the feelings of people. Secondly, different colour codes are used in working places such as offices and hospitals. It is believed that these places have a heavy workload so the authority trying to make it lighter by using colours. In offices people are exhausted from working and same the case with hospitals. In hospitals almost everyone feels unhappy and depressed, some were fighting with serious diseases or may have minor health issues. So it is necessary to paint the wall of these places which bring happiness and filter the negativity. In conclusion, science has proven the effect of colour on feelings and emotions as well as health and stress, needs proper planning on painting of heavy workload buildings.
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is proved
by
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many
scientists and psychology researchers that
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colours
have greater effects on human’s mood. For
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Some
crucial working environment like offices and
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hospitals
, the special concentration
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must
be needed
in terms of
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colour
selection. This easement will discuss whether it is true and how much this persuades the ability of job and one’s health.

First
, I
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agree
with the statement that
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colours
may have
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some
causes on an individual’s mood. Our faces
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got
red when we are angry at something. We feel fresh by when we
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see
greenery nature. The green
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colour
is
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used
to represent the beauty of nature. White and blue
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colours
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make
us feel safe and peaceful. Orange
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colour
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makes
our mind active. There are lots of examples in which psychologist and researchers already proved that
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colours
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change
the feelings of
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people
.

Secondly
,
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different
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colour
codes are
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used
in working places such as offices and
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hospitals
. It
is believed
that these places have a heavy workload
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so
the authority trying to
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make
it lighter by using
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colours
. In offices
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people
are exhausted
from working and same the case with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospitals
. In
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hospitals
almost everyone feels unhappy and depressed,
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some
were fighting with serious diseases or may have minor health issues.
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So
it is necessary to paint the wall of these places which bring happiness and filter the negativity.

In conclusion
, science has proven the effect of
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colour
on feelings and emotions
as well
as health and
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stress
, needs proper planning on painting of heavy workload buildings.
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IELTS essay Talk about a popular actor, musician, or artist whose work you do not admire. Explain why you do not like this person's work. Use specific details and reasons in your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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