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Describe a garden or a park that you have visited recently. Please say- What is this place? - Where is it located? - How often do you visit it? Why? v.1

Describe a garden or a park that you have visited recently. Please say- What is this place? - Where is it located? - How often do you visit it? Why? v. 1
It is irrefutable that, the pollution has become a great threat for Earth’s stability. Many environmentalists suggest for a private vehicle free day, at least once in every month. This opinion has created mixed emotions among the users. In this essay, I intend to delve into the possible advantages and disadvantages arouse by keeping this opinion. First of all, people use private motorised vehicles for their own convenience. Nowadays, it is difficult to find a family without owning at least a car or a bike. The main advantage of using own transport is, saving the clock and moreover, it has become a status symbol. In order to control nature contamination, many environmental activists suggest for the auto free day in a month. Nevertheless, this can help in reduction of carbon emission from the truck, which in turn can avoid the health problems due to air adulterations. Secondly, by controlling the number of vehicles in the street, can considerably control the traffic jams as well as the sound pollution caused by the honking, while in the traffic. The main drawback of prohibiting or limiting automobile is in case of emergency. No one can depend on public modes of transit every time. In case of any serious health issues or like in such situations, one must have to use the owned vehicle. Under the circumstance of jeep free day, then it will be crime that the user will get penalized. Moreover, cars are not only the reason for deterioration, if the authorities won’t do the regular checking up of smoke control in public carriage, then it can also create problems. I would like to suggest that, by creating a better public transportation facility, authorities can make a huge profit in the economy as well as in the public health. The government should create a separate transport lane for the conveyance, so that the valuable time can be saved without getting jammed in between the private vehicles, which will attract more people. To continue with, the officials can conduct a campaign to entice personages to cheaper public transport despite of hiking fuel prices. Companies should have to make an effort for the transportation of their employees in a company owned bus on the shift basis. To conclude, like the two sides of a coin, everything has positive and negative shades. Restricting the cars for a day don’t make much difference. The government, companies, and citizens have to hold their hands together for revamping the pollution related issues. Planting more trees and keeping the forests could make a change, as these can absorb co2 emission.
It is irrefutable that, the pollution has become a great threat for Earth’s stability.
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Many
environmentalists suggest for a private
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vehicle
free day, at least once in every month. This opinion has created mixed emotions among the users. In this essay, I intend to delve into the possible advantages and disadvantages arouse by keeping this opinion.

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First of all
,
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people
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use
private
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motorised
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vehicles
for their
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own
convenience. Nowadays, it is difficult to find a family without owning at least a car or a bike. The main advantage of using
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own
transport is, saving the clock and
moreover
, it has become a status symbol. In order to control nature contamination,
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many
environmental activists suggest for the auto free day in a month.
Nevertheless
, this can
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help
in reduction of carbon emission from the truck, which in turn can avoid the health problems due to air
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adulterations
.
Secondly
, by controlling the number of
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vehicles
in the street, can
considerably
control the traffic jams
as well
as the sound pollution caused by the honking, while in the traffic.

The main drawback of prohibiting or limiting automobile is in case of emergency. No one can depend on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
modes of transit every time. In case of any serious health issues or like in such situations, one
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must
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have to
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use
the
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owned
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vehicle
. Under the circumstance of jeep free day, then it will be crime that the user will
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get
penalized.
Moreover
, cars are not
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only
the reason for deterioration, if the authorities won’t do the regular checking up of smoke control in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
carriage, then it can
also
create problems.

I would like to suggest that, by creating a better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation facility, authorities can
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make
a huge profit in the economy
as well
as in the
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public
health. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should create a separate transport lane for the conveyance,
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so
that the valuable time can
be saved
without getting jammed in between the private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vehicles
, which will attract more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. To continue with, the officials can conduct a campaign to entice personages to cheaper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport
Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?
despite of
hiking fuel prices.
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Companies
should
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have to
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make
an effort for the transportation of their employees in a
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company
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
owned
bus on the shift basis.

To conclude
, like the two sides of a coin, everything has
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positive
and
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negative
shades. Restricting the cars for a day don’t
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make
much difference. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
,
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companies
, and citizens
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have to
hold their hands together for revamping the pollution related issues. Planting more trees and keeping the forests could
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make
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
, as these can absorb co2 emission.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Describe a garden or a park that you have visited recently. Please say- What is this place? - Where is it located? - How often do you visit it? Why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
431 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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