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15. Some students prefer to choose universities located in big cities. Others would like to study inuniversities located in small towns. Please state your opinion and explain why. v.1

15. Some students prefer to choose universities located in big cities. Others would like to study inuniversities located in small towns. Please state your opinion and explain why. v. 1
Owing to the development in technical knowledge over the period of years, man has been a major beneficiary of this new innovation. This essay will agree that new inventions has brought more help to human in communication and health. How has technology improved lives? Firstly, technology has enhanced the way at which people communicate with each other. Prior to new inventions, means of which people sent messages to their families and friends were quite challenging. Individuals had to use the post office or travel over a long distance which could take days and was time consuming to deliver their messages. Whereas, with the advent of advanced softwares and technology such as what's app message, Yahoo mail and telegram. Hence people can now effortlessly and easily send thousand of messages that will be delivered in nanoseconds. It is therefore safe to say that technology has improved the lives of Man. More so, in the health sector, the use automated machines has tremendously helped Health Care Practictioners (HCP) for timely diagnosis of diseases and exploring more complicated surgeries. This was not possible in the past when many illnesses were difficult to identify due to insufficient information. Thus, leading to an overwhelming number of deaths. However, with the use of sophisticated machines there have been an enormous improvement of health. A good example is a report from the National medical Association Kenya (NMA) 2016, showing there was 90% reductions in the mortality and morbidity rate across the country when the government employed new machines such as the Magnetic resonance imaging and X-ray equipments in all hospitals. This outcome, undoubtedly shows the benefits of Hi tech to human as opposed to beliefs that these machines causes cancer. In conclusion, it is evident that increased technical knowledge has assisted mankind in sharing of information and adjusting the quality of life.
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man
has been a major beneficiary of this
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innovation. This essay will
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that
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inventions has brought more
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help
to human in communication and health.

How has
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technology
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improved
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lives
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Firstly
,
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technology
has enhanced the way at which
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people
communicate with each other. Prior to
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new
inventions, means of which
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people
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sent
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messages
to their families and friends were quite challenging. Individuals had to
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the post office or travel over a long distance which could take days and was
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time consuming
to deliver their
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messages
. Whereas, with the advent of advanced
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softwares
and
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technology
such as what's app
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message
, Yahoo mail and telegram.
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Hence
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effortlessly
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technology
has
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automated
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has
tremendously
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Practictioners
(HCP) for timely diagnosis of diseases and exploring more complicated surgeries. This was not possible in the past when
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illnesses were difficult to identify due to insufficient information.
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, leading to an overwhelming number of deaths.
However
, with the
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use
of sophisticated
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machines
there have been an enormous improvement of health. A
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good
example is a report from the National medical Association Kenya (NMA) 2016, showing there was 90% reductions in the mortality and morbidity rate across the country when the
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government
employed
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new
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machines
such as the Magnetic resonance imaging and X-ray equipments in all hospitals. This outcome,
undoubtedly
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shows
the benefits of Hi tech to human as opposed to beliefs that these
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machines
causes cancer.

In conclusion
, it is evident that increased technical knowledge has assisted mankind in sharing of information and adjusting the quality of life.
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IELTS essay 15. Some students prefer to choose universities located in big cities. Others would like to study inuniversities located in small towns. Please state your opinion and explain why. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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