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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this? v.5

Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this? v. 5
Nowadays, supermarkets are filled with food products from around the globe. Yet, there are arguments that supermarkets should not be fulled of imported food. I personally disagree with this idea. Firstly, if there are no imported food products in the supermarket, there will be a shortage of food, which are domestic products. Moreover, some nations do not have enough domestic food for their citizens due to the lack of fertile lands or even the shortage of water. The fact that these countries depends on agricultural nations, such as Ivory Coast has to import rice from Vietnam, which is an agricultural country. Secondly, the act of import increases significantly the chance of earning money and investing in a better live. Workers surely depend on this to raise their incomes. For instance, Kenya relies on their agricultural cuisine import to have a better live. Most Kenyans place their bets on this trade activity to have money for building constructions or having their children to attend schools. Thirdly, this trade activity absolutely reduce all the environment wastes. Additionally, far many food imports are transferred by sea, which cut down on not only the price of these cuisines but also the exhaust fumes. Take Russia as a case in point, with a long coastline, this country successfully lower the pollution which result from transporting food by road. To sum up, the benefits of food imports way overweight the domestic food. I am sure that culture, environment, and people will be profitable from food imports.
Nowadays, supermarkets
are filled
with
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food
products from around the globe.
Yet
, there are arguments that supermarkets should not
be fulled
of imported
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food
. I
personally
disagree with this
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idea
.

Firstly
, if there are no imported
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food
products in the supermarket, there will be a shortage of
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food
, which are domestic products.
Moreover
,
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some
nations do not have
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enough
domestic
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food
for their citizens due to the lack of fertile lands or even the shortage of water. The fact that these countries depends on agricultural nations, such
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as Ivory Coast
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has to
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import
rice from Vietnam, which is an agricultural country.

Secondly
, the act of
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import
increases
significantly
the chance of earning money and investing in a better
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live
. Workers
surely
depend on this to raise their incomes.
For instance
, Kenya relies on their agricultural cuisine
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import
to have a better
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
. Most Kenyans place their bets on this trade activity to have money for building constructions or having their children to attend schools.

Thirdly
, this trade activity
absolutely
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reduce
all the environment wastes.
Additionally
, far
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many
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food
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imports
are transferred
by sea, which
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cut
down on not
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only
the price of these cuisines
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but
also
the exhaust fumes. Take Russia as a case in point, with a long coastline, this country
successfully
lower the pollution which result from transporting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
by road.

To sum up, the benefits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
imports
way overweight the domestic
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food
. I am sure that culture, environment, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
will be profitable from
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food
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
imports
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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