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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. " What are your opinions on this? v.3

Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. " What are your opinions on this? v. 3
Nowadays, local markets are filled with exotic imported goods which leave little room on the shelf for local goods. Some might argue that local markets should solely sell regional merchandise. But in my opinion, I would prefer selling local foods in local markets more than imports from overseas. There are several reasons to explain why food consumption in a country without importing that takes its toll on many aspects of a country. If the number of supermarkets does not have a necessary innovation about ingredients, foods and among others; all residents will become bored with full of out of date products. This means that leading to the dire consequence which all citizens gradually steer clear of these products. Furthermore, the profit of the supermarkets would be declined considerably in the sense that the income of the staffs also could be excessively low, which throws their quality of life in disarray. The benefits of imports is in some countries is the lack of the essential domestic food products. For further elaboration, not all countries have the capabilities to achieve self sufficiency in the matter food products, either for the lack of fertile lands, the harsh conditions or even the lack of sustainable water source. therefore, some countries greatly depend on their neighbouring countries to suffice their need of some absent food products. But currently, many food imports, such as fruit, are transported thousands of miles by road, sea and air, making the product more expensive to buy and increasing pollution from exhaust fumes. Despite the fact that the trade in food exports has existed for many years, I am convinced that a reduction would bring significant financial and environmental gains. And we should imports overseas foods that our countries can’t grow. To sum up, I still agree people importing foods but i hardly support our local farmers. Beside the local economy should, in time, prosper commercially as the demand for local and regional products remains high resisting the competition from overseas.
Nowadays,
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local
markets
are filled
with exotic imported
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goods
which
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leave
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little
room on the shelf for
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local
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goods
.
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Some
might argue that
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local
markets should
solely
sell regional merchandise.
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But
in my opinion, I would prefer selling
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local
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foods
in
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local
markets more than
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imports
from overseas.

There are several reasons to
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explain
why
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food
consumption in a
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country
without importing that takes its toll on
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many
aspects of a
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country
. If the number of supermarkets does not have a necessary innovation about ingredients,
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foods
and among others; all residents will become bored with full of out of date
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products
. This means that leading to the dire consequence which all citizens
gradually
steer
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clear
of these
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products
.
Furthermore
, the profit of the supermarkets would
be declined
considerably
in the sense that the income of the staffs
also
could be
excessively
low, which throws their quality of life in disarray.

The benefits of
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imports
is in
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some
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countries
is the lack of the essential domestic
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food
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products
. For
further
elaboration, not all
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countries
have the capabilities to achieve
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self sufficiency
in the matter
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food
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products
, either for the lack of fertile lands, the harsh conditions or even the lack of sustainable water source.
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therefore
,
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some
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countries
greatly
depend on their
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neighbouring
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countries
to suffice their need of
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some
absent
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food
products.

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But
currently
,
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many
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food
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imports
, such as fruit,
are transported
thousands of miles by road, sea and air, making the
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product
more expensive to
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buy
and increasing pollution from exhaust fumes. Despite the fact that the trade in
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food
exports has existed for
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many
years, I
am convinced
that a reduction would bring significant financial and environmental gains. And we should
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imports
overseas
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foods
that our
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countries
can’t grow.

To sum up, I
still
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agree
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people
importing
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foods
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but
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i
hardly support our
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local
farmers. Beside the
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local
economy should, in time, prosper
commercially
as the demand for
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local
and regional
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products
remains high resisting the competition from overseas.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. " What are your opinions on this? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
330 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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