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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. v.11

Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. v. 11
Only local foods should be provided at supermarkets rather than foods from other countries. We all know that consuming our own goods makes the country’s economy grow, but what if the country does not have enough ingredient for making a healthy meal, kids will not be served healthy meals? In my opinion, I think that every supermarket should provide a variety of ingredients and food. Nowadays, there are many countries that cannot plant the vegetations, due to drought or unfavourable environment, therefore teenagers in those countries will have a lack of vitamins and other minerals. This situation is the most terrible thing that can happen all over the world, because children are one hundred percent of our future, if they do not enough minerals or proteins, these kids can easily get the disease. For instance, youth in some part of the world is starving because their president does not believe that import food from other countries is significant, so they will be having only food that can produce in their environment, such as in some islands they eat Sadeen Fish every day, and that is horrific. On the other hand, in case of supermarket only provide local products, producers in that country will not be unemployed because they are the biggest and the only one who can deliver food, thus the economy will never fall as long as there is no problem with producer, however if all sources are not able to be reaped, due to disasters, the whole country is going to run out of food. To illustrate, there is a small country surrounding with forests, they hunt and harvest from the forests for their food, the economy is growing and keeps growing, unfortunately, one day in the forests are burnt by a fire disaster and take weeks to recover them, will they survive without food for the rest of the week? To conclude, if supermarkets sell only local food, no one cannot guarantee that if there are enough nutrients for those local people or not, in contrast the economy will certainly raise. Finally, I my point of view I think it is the best to provide a variety of food from all over the world in the supermarket.
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countries
. We all know that consuming our
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own
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goods
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makes
the
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country’s
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economy
grow,
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what if the
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country
does not have
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enough
ingredient for making a healthy meal, kids will not
be served
healthy meals? In my opinion, I
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think
that every supermarket should provide a variety of ingredients and food.

Nowadays, there are
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many
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countries
that cannot plant the
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vegetations
, due to drought or
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unfavourable
environment,
therefore
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teenagers
in those
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countries
will have a lack of vitamins and
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other
minerals. This situation is the most terrible thing that can happen all over the world,
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because
children are one hundred percent of our future, if they do not
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enough
minerals or proteins, these kids can
easily
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get
the disease.
For instance
, youth in
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some
part of the world is starving
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because
their president does not believe that import
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food
from
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other
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countries
is significant,
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so
they will be having
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only
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food
that can produce in their environment, such as in
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some
islands they eat
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Sadeen
Fish every day, and
that is
horrific.

On the
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other
hand, in case of supermarket
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only
provide
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local
products, producers in that
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country
will not
be unemployed
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because
they are the biggest and the
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only
one who can deliver
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food
,
thus
the
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economy
will never fall as long as there is no problem with producer,
however
if all sources are not able to
be reaped
, due to disasters, the whole
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country
is going to run out of
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food
. To illustrate, there is a
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small
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country
surrounding with forests, they hunt and harvest from the forests for their
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food
, the
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economy
is growing and
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keeps
growing, unfortunately, one day in the forests
are burnt
by a fire disaster and take weeks to recover them, will they survive without
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food
for the rest of the week?

To conclude
, if supermarkets sell
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only
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local
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food
, no one cannot guarantee that if there are
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enough
nutrients for those
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local
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people
or not,
in contrast
the
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economy
will
certainly
raise.
Finally
, I my point of view I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it is the best to provide a variety of
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food
from all over the world in the supermarket.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
370 words
7.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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