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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reason for your an v.15

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Give reason for your an v. 15
Playing sports for a country or a club is a famous occupation. These, well known sportsmen have income that is much greater than individuals in other important professions. Although, some people favours this trend while other believe that this is injustice. In my opinion, every occupation has its own significance and having more money in one type of work does not make it injustice for individual in other profession. First of all, it is a fact that athletes are very well paid and are famous all around the world. Moreover, they are very well facilitated and are also preferred over general population. For instance, famous cricketer Sachin tendulkar have a balance of more than hundred crore rupees and is among top ten richest men of India. furthermore his salary is about ten to twenty lacs a month. Nevertheless he is specially paid for every match he play. By viewing all these facts and figures, we might convinced that it is not justice but this only one side of the picture. in contrary, the above luxury is not uniform, some individuals in one sport are paid more than individual in other. For example members of Pakistani football team have salaries of few thousand rupees. In addition to this, a sportsman professional life starts fading as time passes on and become an ordinary citizen with a very low income as he grow above fifties. Opposite to this, if we consider another occupation like medicine, doctors earning keep increasing even though he retired. This is because in many professions experience counts rather than physical fitness. To conclude, every work has its own advantages and drawbacks. some might earn more but that would be for a short time while other has an income that which peaked with time. So, I believe judging a job only by salary and its amount would be an injustice.
Playing sports for a country or a club is a
famous
occupation. These, well known sportsmen have income
that is
much greater than
individuals
in
other
important
professions. Although,
some
people
favours
this trend while
other
believe that this is injustice. In my opinion, every occupation has its
own
significance and having more money in one type of work does not
make
it injustice for
individual
in
other
profession.

First of all
, it is a fact that athletes are
very
well paid and are
famous
all around the world.
Moreover
, they are
very
well facilitated and are
also
preferred over general population.
For instance
,
famous
cricketer
Sachin
tendulkar
have a balance of more than
hundred
crore rupees and is among top ten richest
men
of India.
furthermore
his salary is about ten to twenty
lacs
a month.
Nevertheless
he is
specially
paid for every match he
play
. By viewing all these facts and figures, we might
convinced
that it is not justice
but
this
only
one side of the picture.

in
contrary, the above luxury is not uniform,
some
individuals
in one sport
are paid
more than
individual
in
other
.
For example
members of Pakistani football team have salaries of few thousand rupees.
In addition
to this, a sportsman professional life
starts
fading as time passes on and become an ordinary citizen with a
very
low income as he
grow
above fifties. Opposite to this, if we consider another occupation like medicine, doctors earning
keep
increasing
even though
he retired. This is
because
in
many
professions experience counts
rather
than physical fitness.

To conclude
, every work has its
own
advantages and drawbacks.
some
might earn more
but
that would be for a short time while
other
has an income that which peaked with time.
So
, I believe judging a job
only
by salary and its amount would be an injustice.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Give reason for your an v. 15

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