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TPO 6 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children v.2

TPO 6 Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children v. 2
Nowadays people enjoy and have access to a variety of goods that might make their lives more comfortable than our gardparents had in the past. It is thought by some that our grantparents had a good life compare to ourlives today. This essay will discuss why in fact, our lives are easier today than our' s grandparents lives. To begin with, with the development of technology people have changed completely the way they live their lives. They have invented tools that are useful and efficient, which makes everybody' s life comfortable. For instance, the improvement of transportation is an obvious development that shows why people' s lives are different and easier than people' s in the past. In addition, these services are affordable by everyone. On the other hand, in the past our grandparents did not have access to the most of these utilities because they could not afforded. If the transportation would have been available to all past generations, then they would have had easy lives as we have today. Secondly, People today have learned from mistakes that are made from people in the past, so that have helped them to find a new easy ways to deal with complex problems, and have an answer for a variety of similare things that might happen in the furure. This would make peoples lives easier and rais awarenes in the way they would behave. For example, a couple of days ago, I read an article in a newspaper, which mentioned a recent research held by University of Totonto. This research indicated that any generation in the past have always shared their experiences and have tried to improve and make things easy for the foreseeable future, the results of that are clearly seen to the easy and convinient life that everyone has today. If our grandparents would not have worked hard to improve things for the next generation, then we might not ever had an easy life. To sum up, our lives are easy today than our' s grandparents were in the past. This is because we are living in a time where the technology is advanced and people today have learned and do not repeat the same mistakes made by our grandparents. Thus, we have gained knowledge from them and based on that knowledge we have made our lives easy in any aspect.
Nowadays
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people
enjoy and have access to a variety of
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goods
that might
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make
their
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lives
more comfortable than our
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gardparents
had in the
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past
. It is
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thought
by
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some
that our
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grantparents
had a
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good
life compare to
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ourlives
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today
. This essay will discuss why in fact, our
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lives
are easier
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today
than
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our&
#039; s
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grandparents
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lives
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To
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begin
with, with the development of technology
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people
have
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changed
completely the way they
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live
their
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lives
. They have invented tools that are useful and efficient, which
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makes
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everybody&
#039; s life comfortable.
For instance
, the improvement of transportation is an obvious development that
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shows
why
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people&
#039; s
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lives
are
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different
and easier than
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people&
#039; s in the
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past
.
In addition
, these services are affordable by everyone.
On the other hand
, in the
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past
our
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grandparents
did not have access to the most of these utilities
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because
they could not
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afforded
. If the transportation
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would have been
available to all
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past
generations, then they would have had
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easy
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lives
as we have
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today
.

Secondly
,
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People
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today
have learned from mistakes that
are made
from
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people
in the
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past
,
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so
that have
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helped them to find
a new
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easy
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ways
to deal with complex problems, and have an answer for a variety of
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similare
things that might happen in the
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furure
. This would
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make
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peoples
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lives
easier and
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rais
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awarenes
in the way they would behave.
For example
, a couple of days ago, I read an article in a newspaper, which mentioned a recent research held by University of
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Totonto
. This research indicated that any generation in the
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past
have always shared their experiences and have tried to
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improve
and
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make
things
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easy
for the foreseeable future, the results of that are
clearly
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seen
to the
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easy
and
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convinient
life that everyone has
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today
. If our
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grandparents
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would not have
worked
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hard
to
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improve
things for the
next
generation, then we might not ever had an
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easy
life.

To sum up, our
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lives
are
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easy
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today
than
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our&
#039; s
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grandparents
were in the
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past
. This is
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because
we are living in a
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time where
the technology
is advanced
and
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people
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today
have learned and do not repeat the same mistakes made by our
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grandparents
.
Thus
, we have gained knowledge from them and based on that knowledge we have made our
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lives
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easy
in any aspect.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO 6 Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
392 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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