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Students should pay the full cost of university studies rather than have free higher education provided by the government To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Students should pay the full cost of university studies rather than have free higher education provided by the government v. 1
Affluent nations should open their doors to refugees and give them a place to stay and food to eat. This essay strongly agrees with that opinion and believes that developed countries should allow refugees to enter their homeland because it is the right thing to do. This essay will first discuss how rich nations should not turn refugees away, on the basis of humanitarian grounds, followed by a reasoned conclusion. Developed countries should permit refugees to enter their homeland because it is their moral prerogative. It is the duty of powerful countries to help the weaker ones in times of need. They shouldn't let the poor and innocent suffer when they are facing a crisis back at home. For example, the USA has shown humanity and welcomed millions of Syrian refugees who are fleeing from their country because of war. However, there is an unpopular opinion that wealthy nations shouldn't let refugees enter their country because they might use up its resources. This is ridiculous in the sense that there is always plenty to give. If resources are allocated wisely then there is no cause of worry and refugees can be provided with the basic support that they need to live. To illustrate, Canada has successfully helped in resettling over half a million refugees in the years 2018 and 2019 alone without facing a deficit in their resources. In conclusion, rich countries should welcome refugees and provide them with basic aid because it is their moral obligation and this does not in any way deplete a country's resources.
Affluent nations should open their doors to
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refugees
and give them a place to stay and food to eat. This essay
strongly
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agrees
with that opinion and believes that developed
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countries
should
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allow
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refugees
to enter their homeland
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because
it is the right thing to do. This essay will
first
discuss how rich nations should not turn
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refugees
away, on the basis of humanitarian grounds, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

Developed
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countries
should permit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
refugees
to enter their homeland
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is their moral prerogative. It is the duty of powerful
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countries
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the weaker ones in times of need. They shouldn't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
the poor and innocent suffer when they are facing a crisis back at home.
For example
, the USA has shown humanity and welcomed millions of Syrian
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refugees
who are fleeing from their
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country
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of war.

However
, there is an unpopular opinion that wealthy nations shouldn't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
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refugees
enter their
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country
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
up its resources. This is ridiculous in the sense that there is always
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
to give. If resources
are allocated
wisely
then there is no cause of worry and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
refugees
can
be provided
with the basic support that they need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
. To illustrate, Canada has
successfully
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
in resettling over half a million
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
refugees
in the years 2018 and 2019 alone without facing a deficit in their resources.

In conclusion
, rich
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countries
should welcome
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refugees
and provide them with basic aid
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is their moral obligation and this does not in any way deplete a country's resources.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Students should pay the full cost of university studies rather than have free higher education provided by the government v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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