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Some people say that it is not good for children to grow up in the city and that the countryside is more suitable for them. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people say that it is not good for children to grow up in the city and that the countryside is more suitable for them. v. 1
Health issues are increasing in enormous number due to over consumption of fast food and this situation is worsening day by day. If governments don't take any prompt action, like imposing of higher taxes along with other considerable steps, it would be difficult to cope with this situation. So, I partially agree with this idea of imposing higher taxes because that is only a single step, many other fruitful steps can be taken to make things better. Fast food is a cheaply and readily available, that’s why people are taking it in large amount. At first place, It is argued that imposition of higher taxes leads to the increase of the price of this type of food because companies pass down this effect to its consumers and prices of fast food would increase. If they eat junk food thrice in a day before, they might eat it twice or one time in a day, at least some reduction in its utility would obvious. For instance, an article published in 'The Times' magazine revealed that people tend to buy cheap burgers instead of costly one because they prefer quantity over quality. In fact, inclusion of tax is not enough remedy to control this menace which is proving fatal for people’s health. Awareness among people should be created through different mediums like TV channels, newspapers, seminars and walks. They should have realized the adverse effects of consuming too much fast food because it is fatal for physical and mental growth especially for children. For example, it has been proved through many researches that quality of oil and the type of the meat, particularly chicken is causing many hormonal imbalances in human beings. Therefore, it should be dealt with iron hands. In a nutshell, imposing higher taxes by government on a fast food item would have a better impact on reducing the amount of fast food eaten by people, but not satisfactory enough to control this situation fully. Therefore, several other measures like seminars, walks and awareness through different mediums can help to curb this evil completely.
Health issues are increasing in enormous number due to over consumption of
fast
food
and this situation is worsening day by day. If
governments
don't take any prompt action, like imposing of higher
taxes
along with other considerable steps, it would be difficult to cope with this situation.
So
, I
partially
agree
with this
idea
of imposing higher
taxes
because
that is
only
a single step,
many
other fruitful steps can
be taken
to
make
things better.

Fast
food
is a
cheaply
and
readily
available, that’s why
people
are taking it in large amount. At
first
place, It
is argued
that imposition of higher
taxes
leads to the increase of the price of this type of
food
because
companies
pass down this effect to its consumers and prices of
fast
food
would increase. If they eat junk
food
thrice in a day
before
, they might eat it twice or one time in a day, at least
some
reduction in its utility would obvious.
For instance
, an article published in 'The Times' magazine revealed that
people
tend to
buy
cheap
burgers
instead
of costly one
because
they
prefer quantity over quality
.

In fact, inclusion of
tax
is not
enough
remedy to control this menace which is proving fatal for
people’s
health. Awareness among
people
should
be created
through
different
mediums like TV channels, newspapers, seminars and walks. They should have realized the adverse effects of consuming too much
fast
food
because
it is fatal for physical and mental growth
especially
for children.
For example
, it has
been proved
through
many
researches that quality of oil and the type of the meat,
particularly
chicken is causing
many
hormonal imbalances in human beings.
Therefore
, it should
be dealt
with iron hands.

In a nutshell, imposing higher
taxes
by
government
on a
fast
food
item would have a better impact on reducing the amount of
fast
food
eaten by
people
,
but
not satisfactory
enough
to control this situation
fully
.
Therefore
, several other measures like seminars, walks and awareness through
different
mediums can
help
to curb this evil completely.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people say that it is not good for children to grow up in the city and that the countryside is more suitable for them. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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