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Describe a teacher who has influenced you in your education. You should say: where you met themwhat subject they taughtwhat was special about themand explain why this person influenced you so much v.1

Describe a teacher who has influenced you in your education. You should say: where you met themwhat subject they taughtwhat was special about themand explain why this person influenced you so much v. 1
Nowadays, many crimes are prevalent in big cities. This essay will examine the main causes of increasing youth crime and possible solutions of this problem. The first reason that is connected to juvenile delinquencies is the family in which a child grows up. Nowadays parent should work so they could not look after their children as well as they could do it earlier. Take an example, a child who does not get enough attention from family and does not spend a lot of time together, will be feeling unnecessary, and then the child will spend time with friends which can influence him to do crime. This child is more likely to become a petty criminal now and serial criminal. Another reason is that in this globalization era, levels of poverty have been increased so the poor become poorer and the rich get richer. It means that the poorer will try to get things that others have, even if it is illegal. It is obvious that it will include the children in poorer families. Some possible solutions to this problem are punishments and education. Punishment is considered as a major way to fight with the problem. Stricter punishment, not only for the children, but also for their parents. Parents also have to take more responsibility for their children’s actions. Also, education can help to stop juvenile delinquencies. And if youth would have the chance to work and earn money, they would become more experienced and it maybe would prevent teenagers from committing crime. To conclude, there are several reasons that have led to crime in youth. Poverty and parents are connected to increase the level of crimes in the youth, but education and punishments can help to fight with juvenile delinquent.
Nowadays,
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many
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crimes
are prevalent in
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big
cities. This essay will examine the main causes of increasing
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youth
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crime
and possible solutions of this problem.

The
first
reason that
is connected
to juvenile delinquencies is the family in which a
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child
grows up. Nowadays
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parent
should work
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so
they could not look after their
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children
as well
as they could do it earlier. Take an example, a
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child
who does not
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get
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enough
attention from family and does not spend
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a lot of
time together, will be feeling unnecessary, and then the
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child
will spend time with friends which can influence him to do
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crime
. This
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child
is more likely to become a petty criminal
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now
and serial criminal. Another reason is that in this globalization era, levels of poverty have
been increased
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so
the poor become poorer and the rich
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get
richer. It means that the poorer will try to
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get
things that others have, even if it is illegal. It is obvious that it will include the
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children
in poorer families.

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Some
possible solutions to this problem are
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punishments
and education.
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Punishment
is considered
as a major way to fight with the problem. Stricter
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punishment
, not
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only
for the
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children
,
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but
also
for their
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parents
.
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Parents
also
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have to
take more responsibility for their
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children’s
actions.
Also
, education can
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help
to
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stop
juvenile delinquencies. And if
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youth
would have the chance to work and earn money, they would become more experienced and it maybe would
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prevent
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teenagers
from committing crime.

To conclude
, there are several reasons that have led to
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crime
in
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youth
. Poverty and
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parents
are connected
to increase the level of
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crimes
in the
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youth
,
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but
education and
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punishments
can
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help
to fight with juvenile delinquent.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe a teacher who has influenced you in your education. You should say: where you met themwhat subject they taughtwhat was special about themand explain why this person influenced you so much v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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