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Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than have free higher education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than have free higher education provided by the state. with this statement? v. 3
Free tertiary education has always sparks heated debates all over the world. I, personally, completely disagree that higher education cost should be borne by students because that would prevent the waste of talent resource and also it is a form investment for the government in the long run. When higher education comes with a cost, it creates an inefficient allocation of the human resource. This is because when there is a financial constraint, some students from the less privileged background are forced to choose the courses that either is not too costly or have good employability prospects and not necessarily courses that the students want most or are best at. As a result, for example, instead of being an excellent artist, the student can only be a mediocre accountant because he cannot utilise all his potential in his chosen field, causing a waste of talent; free higher education can prevent this problem. The second reason why tertiary education should be free is because if the government chooses not to spend money on free education, they will see rising expenditures in other areas. For example, a less educated workforce bears a higher risk of unemployment in the economic downturn, and thus the government’s coffers for unemployment aid would need to increase. Furthermore, unskilled labour earns much less than college-educated people do, and thus they contribute less income tax I. e. , less revenue for the government. Not to mention, the highly skilled population is essential to any country’s economic growth in the long run. In conclusion, because free education allows students to learn what they enjoy most and are best at, it can ensure better allocation of the human resource. Furthermore, free education can reduce unemployment cost in the economic downturn, increase government’s tax revenue, and increase economic growth in the long run. Thus, I completely disagree that students should pay for their higher education.
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tertiary
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education
has always sparks heated debates all over the world. I,
personally
, completely disagree that higher
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education
cost should
be borne
by
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students
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because
that would
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prevent
the waste of talent resource and
also
it is a form investment for the
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government
in the long run.

When higher
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education
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comes
with a cost, it creates an inefficient allocation of the human resource. This is
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because
when there is a financial constraint,
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some
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students
from the
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less
privileged background
are forced
to choose the courses that either is not too costly or have
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good
employability prospects and not
necessarily
courses that the
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students
want most or are best at.
As a result
,
for example
,
instead
of being an excellent artist, the
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student
can
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only
be a mediocre accountant
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because
he cannot
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utilise
all his potential in his chosen field, causing a waste of talent;
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free
higher
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education
can
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prevent
this problem.

The second reason why tertiary
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education
should be
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free
is
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because
if the
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government
chooses not to spend money on
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free
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education
, they will
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see
rising expenditures in other areas.
For example
, a
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less
educated workforce bears a higher
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risk
of unemployment in the
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economic
downturn, and
thus
the
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government’s
coffers for unemployment aid would need to increase.
Furthermore
, unskilled
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labour
earns much
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less
than college-educated
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people
do, and
thus
they contribute
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less
income tax
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I. e.
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,
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less
revenue for the
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government
. Not to mention, the
highly
skilled population is essential to any country’s
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economic
growth in the long run.

In conclusion
,
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because
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free
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education
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allows
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students
to learn what they enjoy most and are best at, it can ensure better allocation of the human resource.
Furthermore
,
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free
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education
can
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reduce
unemployment cost in the
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economic
downturn, increase
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government’s
tax revenue, and increase
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economic
growth in the long run.
Thus
, I completely disagree that
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students
should pay for their higher
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education
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than have free higher education provided by the state. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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