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Students learn more in large lectures classes than in small discussion classes. Agree/disagree v.1

Students learn more in large lectures classes than in small discussion classes. Agree/disagree v. 1
The pronouncement of the death penalty on people who intentionally end the life of another citizen by any society amounts to a guilt of the same crime. It is, therefore, believed that instead of making people pay with their lives, they could be sent to prison all their lives. While I agree that serving jail terms is the best punishment in the sense that it helps prune the behaviour of the offender, I disagree that any society becomes guilty for carrying out their civic responsibilities. Every communion, through its leaders and appropriate agencies, is charged with the responsibility of law enforcement. Making sure there is equal rights and justice for everyone reassures every citizen in a state of their safety. If there is no commensurate punishment for bad behaviour, people will leverage on the porous nature of the law to commit frequent crimes. The government of Lagos State is a good example. On several occasions, they have been on the watch to ensure proper safety of lives - through law enforcement agencies, who escalate any activity that is classified as a felony to appropriate quarters. Subsequently, such people are prosecuted and given a punishment that equates their crime. This makes the city a peaceful one. Remand in custody could help make a better person out of any criminal. Rehabilitation programs, which avail inmates the opportunity to learn different skills that would make them responsible, might become effective while serving a jail term. For instance, prisoners in Kiri Kiri, Nigeria's largest prison, are pushed into learning different skills. After achieving this, they are sometimes granted freedom - especially when distinguished by what they had learned. They return to the society reformed and ready to give back through good services. In conclusion, societies should not be seen as guilty for performing their roles, but if they consider imprisonment as the best way to punish offenders, it would not be a bad method because a criminal today might become more meaningful through it.
The pronouncement of the death penalty on
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people
who
intentionally
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end
the life of another citizen by any
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society
amounts to a guilt of the same crime. It is,
therefore
, believed that
instead
of making
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people
pay with their
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lives
, they could be
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sent
to prison all their
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lives
. While I
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agree
that serving jail terms is the best punishment in the sense that it
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helps
prune the
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behaviour
of the offender, I disagree that any
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society
becomes guilty for carrying out their civic responsibilities.

Every communion,
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through
its leaders and appropriate agencies,
is charged
with the responsibility of law enforcement. Making sure
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there is equal rights
and justice for everyone reassures every citizen in a state of their safety. If there is no commensurate punishment for
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bad
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behaviour
,
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people
will leverage on the porous nature of the law to commit frequent crimes. The
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government
of Lagos State is a
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good
example. On several occasions, they have been on the
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watch
to ensure proper safety of
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lives
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-
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through
law enforcement agencies, who escalate any activity that
is classified
as a felony to appropriate quarters.
Subsequently
, such
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people
are prosecuted
and
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given
a punishment that equates their crime. This
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makes
the city a peaceful one.

Remand in custody could
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help
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make
a better person out of any criminal. Rehabilitation programs, which avail inmates the opportunity to learn
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different
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skills
that would
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make
them responsible, might become effective while serving a jail term.
For instance
, prisoners in
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Kiri Kiri
, Nigeria's largest prison,
are pushed
into learning
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different
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skills
. After achieving this, they are
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sometimes
granted freedom
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-
especially
when distinguished by what they had learned. They return to the
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society
reformed and ready to give back
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through
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good
services.

In conclusion
,
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societies
should not be
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seen
as guilty for performing their roles,
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but
if they consider imprisonment as the best way to punish offenders, it would not be a
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bad
method
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because
a criminal
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today
might become more meaningful
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through
it.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Students learn more in large lectures classes than in small discussion classes. Agree/disagree v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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