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PART 2Describe a festival that is important in your country. You should say: when the festival occurs what you did during it what you like or dislike about it and explain why this festival is important. You will have to talk about the topic for one to v.1

PART 2Describe a festival that is important in your country. You should say: when the festival occurs what you did during it what you like or dislike about it and explain why this festival is important. You will have to talk about the topic for one to v. 1
The way people interact with their neighbours has been changed significantly. People used to have a close relationship with neighbours and help each other, however, people tend to have a distance to their neighbours in recent years. This essay will discuss reasons for this phenomenon and also provide some solutions. There are several possible reasons for this issue. People often move out of their hometown and live alone in a big city away from their family and friends. This leads to social isolation as they are new to the place, mitigating the communication in the new environment. In addition, people spend more hours at work, therefore, less hours are used for socialisation with neighbours. Thus, changes in lifestyle contribute to social isolation and create a distance with neighbours. As social interaction is important to create a safe and friendly environment within the community, some measurements should be taken to solve this problem. One of the possible solutions is to organise a community event such as a festival where people can get together and know each other. This will give an opportunity to interact with neighbours, even though they are new to the community. In addition, regular community gatherings can promote the social interaction between people, creating a chance to discuss any concerns and familiarise each other. In conclusion, although people have less time to socialise with neighbours due to increased working hours recently, social interactions should be encouraged to create a safe and friendly environment. Some community events would be helpful in creating an opportunity to interact with residents within the community and get to know each other.
The way
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people
interact with their
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neighbours
has been
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changed
significantly
.

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People
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used
to have a close relationship with
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neighbours
and
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help
each other,
however
,
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people
tend to have a distance to their
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neighbours
in recent years. This essay will discuss reasons for this phenomenon and
also
provide
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some
solutions.

There are several possible reasons for this issue.
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People
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often
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move
out of their hometown and
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live
alone in a
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big
city away from their family and friends. This leads to
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social
isolation as they are new to the place, mitigating the communication in the new environment.
In addition
,
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people
spend more hours at work,
therefore
,
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less hours
are
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used
for
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socialisation
with
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neighbours
.
Thus
,
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changes
in lifestyle contribute to
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social
isolation and create a distance with
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neighbours
.

As
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social
interaction is
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important
to create a safe and friendly environment within the
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community
,
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some
measurements should
be taken
to solve this problem. One of the possible solutions is to
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organise
a
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community
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event
such as a festival where
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people
can
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get
together and know each other. This will give an opportunity to interact with
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neighbours
,
even though
they are new to the
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community
.
In addition
, regular
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community
gatherings can promote the
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social
interaction between
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people
, creating a chance to discuss any concerns and
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familiarise
each other.

In conclusion
, although
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people
have less time to
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socialise
with
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neighbours
due to increased working hours recently,
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social
interactions should
be encouraged
to create a safe and friendly environment.
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Some
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community
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events
would be helpful in creating an opportunity to interact with residents within the
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community
and
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get
to know each other.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay PART 2Describe a festival that is important in your country. You should say: when the festival occurs what you did during it what you like or dislike about it and explain why this festival is important. You will have to talk about the topic for one to v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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