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Students in schools should learn practical skills like car maintenance and managing a bank accounts to academic subjects. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Students in schools should learn practical skills like car maintenance and managing a bank accounts to academic subjects. v. 1
Free will relieve jobs is believed by several individuals to be a mandatory part of secondary institution scheme. For instance, working in a non government organization, enhancing the community or coaching teenagers on sports activity, which I strongly agree with. To begin, contributed support services have been of great benefits to the community as whole and imbibing it as an essential schedule in colleges will not be a bad idea, as it is undoubtedly a good contribution to the society, also for the development of the students. For example, pupils could decide to do nothing with their leisure hours, contrary to this, getting them involved in an unforced contributed social welfare of the public helps in developing and preparing them for the future, which was supported by the world health organization that youth who assist in support services are braced up to be good citizens who has a passion towards humanity and to also be firm enough to face the challenges of life that may arise in later life. In addition, this unsalaried series of measures are on benefits to the study centres involved as their colleges will be role models for other schools and a reference place for students of Junior school, especially with the fact that educating younger ones about sport is one of these extra curricular activities. This has also had a way for means of interaction amongst different age groups, calibre, races. To conclude, on this topic, unforced social welfare is important and therefore, it is a good idea if made compulsory in high school for the benefits of the locality involved.
Free will relieve jobs
is believed
by several individuals to be a mandatory part of secondary institution scheme.
For instance
, working in a non
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government
organization, enhancing the community or coaching
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
on sports activity, which I
strongly
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agree
with.

To
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begin
, contributed support services have been of great benefits to the community as whole and imbibing it as an essential schedule in colleges will not be a
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bad
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idea
, as it is
undoubtedly
a
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good
contribution to the society,
also
for the development of the students.
For example
, pupils could decide to do nothing with their leisure hours, contrary to this, getting them involved in an unforced contributed social welfare of the public
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in developing and preparing them for the future, which
was supported
by the
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world health organization
that youth who assist in support services
are braced
up to be
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good
citizens who
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has
a passion towards humanity and to
also
be firm
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enough
to face the challenges of life that may arise in later life.

In addition
, this
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unsalaried
series of measures are on benefits to the study
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centres
involved as their colleges will be role models for other schools and a reference place for students of Junior school,
especially
with the fact that educating younger ones about sport is one of these
This word is normally spelled as one.
extra curricular
activities. This has
also
had a way for means of interaction amongst
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
age groups,
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calibre
, races.

To conclude
, on this topic, unforced social welfare is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
and
therefore
, it is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
if made compulsory in high school for the benefits of the locality involved.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Students in schools should learn practical skills like car maintenance and managing a bank accounts to academic subjects. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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