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Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that universities should make it easier for them to access higher education. v.1

Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that universities should make it easier for them to access higher education. v. 1
As the enrollments of different higher institutions are increasing each year, more students coming from countrysides or rural areas are attending universities. However, some of them feel the education in the university is hard for them to comprehend regardless of the contents of courses or the assignments placed by instructors. Regarding this situation, people think higher education institutions should lower the standard or level of study so that rural students can access them easily. Admittedly, the education in higher institution sometimes really poses a tough situation on rural students. What they have learned or how they have processed the contents from school have to be changed once they get into universities. As a result of this, some of them are unable to adapt to the methods required to be used here. More frustratingly they might concern about dropping out if they could not continue their study. From this perspective, a higher institution should consider lowering the standard for rural students to keep the original pace of study. In addition, although universities are not the place where everyone can get involved in, in another word, once any pupils have been accepted by them, they are supposed to realise how tough the study would be, this really depends on the backgrounds of different pupils. Therefore, developing bridge programmes seems an efficient method for both rural students and schools themselves. Not only can pupils enhance their capacities for acquiring higher education, teachers can also fully learn about each individual student. This contributes to ease the burden on difficulties on students. However, to tackle this awkward circumstance means that schools are supposed to sacrifice to some extent. For instance, lowering standards for students from rural areas presents that the reputation that schools have obtained may be affected. More seriously, if this happened, the immediate impact on universities would be the loss of experienced teachers and funds raised by the local government. In conclusion, to alter the strategies for assisting rural students to access higher education is one of the most important implementations that universities should consider. However, schools have to address this issue discreetly or it would pose a threat to school’s reputation and their employment of staff. Establishing bridge programmes seems to be one of the feasible approaches for achieving the balance in the number of rural students in universities.
As the enrollments of
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different
higher institutions are increasing each year, more
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students
coming from countrysides or
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rural
areas are attending
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universities
.
However
,
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some
of them feel the
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education
in the
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university
is
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hard
for them to comprehend regardless of the contents of courses or the assignments placed by instructors. Regarding this situation,
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people
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think
higher
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education
institutions should lower the standard or level of study
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so
that
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rural
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students
can access them
easily
.

Admittedly
, the
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education
in higher
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institution
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sometimes
really
poses a tough situation on
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rural
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students
. What they have learned or how they have processed the contents from
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school
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have to
be
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changed
once they
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get
into
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universities
.
As a result
of this,
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some
of them are unable to adapt to the methods required to be
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used
here. More
frustratingly
they might concern about dropping out if they could not continue their study. From this perspective, a higher
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institution
should consider lowering the standard for
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rural
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students
to
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keep
the original pace of study.

In addition
, although
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universities
are not the place where everyone can
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get
involved in, in another word, once any pupils have been
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accepted
by them, they
are supposed
to
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realise
how tough the study would be, this
really
depends on the backgrounds of
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different
pupils.
Therefore
, developing bridge
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programmes
seems an efficient method for both
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rural
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students
and
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schools
themselves. Not
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only
can pupils enhance their capacities for acquiring higher
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education
, teachers can
also
fully
learn about each individual
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student
. This contributes to
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ease
the burden on difficulties on students.

However
, to tackle this awkward circumstance means that
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schools
are supposed
to sacrifice to
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some
extent.
For instance
, lowering standards for
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students
from
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rural
areas presents that the reputation that
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schools
have obtained may be
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affected
. More
seriously
, if this happened, the immediate impact on
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universities
would be the loss of experienced teachers and funds raised by the local
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government
.

In conclusion
, to alter the strategies for assisting
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rural
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students
to access higher
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education
is one of the most
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important
implementations that
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universities
should consider.
However
,
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schools
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have to
address this issue
discreetly
or it would pose a threat to
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school’s
reputation and their employment of staff. Establishing bridge
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programmes
seems to be one of the feasible approaches for achieving the balance in the number of
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rural
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students
in
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universities
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Students from rural areas often find it difficult to access university education. Some people think that universities should make it easier for them to access higher education. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
387 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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