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In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? v.6

In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? v. 6
It is undoubtedly the case that urban areas around the world increasingly suffer from traffic congestion. In this essay, I will examine the reasons for this trend and suggest some practical policies the authorities could implement to reduce the level of traffic in our cities. The first step is to understand why traffic has increased in towns and cities. Broadly speaking, there are three main reasons for this. One is that cars have become more affordable for the average consumers and they are no longer a luxury item, but something that most families expect to own. A second reason is that public transport has become increasingly unreliable in recent years, not least because many bus and train services have been reduced because of the difficulty in funding them. The third reason is that society has, in general, become more mobile and this means more people are prepared to commute to work by car than they were before. The biggest causes of traffic jam lack of proper road and bridges in cities. If there is an additional way for buses and large trucks in cities, traffic jams reduce in cities. There is almost certainly no one solution to this problem given the complexity of its causes. However, one option has to be to improve the reliability of public transport to encourage people to take the bus or the train rather than get in the car. It would also be possible to discourage people from driving to work by introducing special tariffs for using the roads, especially during peak periods. In conclusion, there are a variety of different factors that have led to rising levels of traffic in urban areas. While it may not be possible to find a complete solution but actions should probably involve encouraging more use of public transports. Furthermore, taxes on private cars should be increased and eco-friendly transportation like bicycles should be promoted.
It is
undoubtedly
the case that urban areas around the world
increasingly
suffer from
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traffic
congestion. In this essay, I will examine the
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reasons
for this trend and suggest
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some
practical policies the authorities could implement to
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reduce
the level of
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traffic
in our cities.

The
first
step is to understand why
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traffic
has increased in towns and cities.
Broadly
speaking, there are three main
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reasons
for this. One is that
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cars
have become more affordable for the average
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consumers and
they are no longer a luxury item,
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but
something that most families
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expect
to
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own
. A second
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reason
is that public transport has become
increasingly
unreliable in recent years, not least
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because
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many
bus and train services have been
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reduced
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because
of the difficulty in funding them. The third
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reason
is that society has,
in general
, become more mobile and this means more
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people
are prepared
to commute to work by
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car
than they were
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before
.

The biggest causes of
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traffic
jam lack of proper road and bridges in cities. If there is an additional way for buses and large trucks in cities,
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traffic
jams
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reduce
in cities.

There is almost
certainly
no one solution to this problem
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given
the complexity of its causes.
However
, one option
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has to
be to
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improve
the reliability of public transport to encourage
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people
to take the bus or the train
rather
than
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get
in the
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car
. It would
also
be possible to discourage
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people
from driving to work by introducing special tariffs for using the roads,
especially
during peak periods.

In conclusion
, there are a variety of
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different
factors that have led to rising levels of
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traffic
in urban areas. While it may not be possible to find a complete solution
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but
actions should
probably
involve encouraging more
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use
of public transports.
Furthermore
, taxes on private
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cars
should
be increased
and eco-friendly transportation like bicycles should
be promoted
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem? v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
316 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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