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students do reading by their own is as important as or more important than the reading teachers assigned v.2

students do reading by their own is as important as or more important than the reading teachers assigned v. 2
Currently, the society is paying more attention to pedagogical methods, therefore what materials should be read by students become a controversial topic. Some people reckon that reading as their own wishes is the optimal approach to improving their academic performances, while others believe that reading what teachers have assigned is expedient for them, especially when time is limited. As far as I am concerned, I agree that it is better for students to choose their reading materials according to their own demands rather than being restricted by teachers’ assignments and my arguments for this point are listed as follows. One of the primary causes is that choosing books based on their personal preference can trigger their real interests in reading. As a result, they may have higher efficiency to finish the job. Additionally, it also exaggerates their possibility of having deep understanding of books. Imagine a scene like this, if a student were asked to read something tedious, he or she would probably not have passion and energy to do so, which exerts negative influences on absorbing knowledge. Here is a case in point. Steve Jobs was extremely fond of electronic devices. Hence, driven by his enthusiasm for it, he read plenty of books about electronic engineering. What if he was forced to read books beyond his area of interest, for instance, natural science or art? It was impossible for him to achieve the same extraordinary success he had done. This example delineates that academic interests play an important role in enhance students’ performances, thus more freedom should be authorized to students. In addition, choosing reading materials cultivates the ability to make decisions independently among several options. More concretely, when students are making their reading lists, it is unavoidable for them to compare different books and estimate which one has the higher value. If they make their choice without acquiring help from teachers, they become more experienced in tackling tasks individually. For instance, I make acquaintance with a friend named Michael whose life is completely arranged by his parents. His parents make almost all the choices for him such as which city to live in and which career to specialize in. Therefore, his lack of experience in making choices gives rise to his insufficiency in make choices without resorting to others. Admittedly, some individuals may argue that teachers are fully fledged in choosing books so that they are capable of designating a more suitable reading list for students. It is actually true that, to some extent, it is essential for us to seek suggestions from experts in a certain field. However, if we are over-reliant on others’ assistance when we are confronted with adversity, it is likely that we fail to attain well-rounded abilities and tackle hardships by ourselves. Generally speaking, it is essential for students to make their own choices to decide which books to read, because making personal reading list not only generates students’ learning enthusiasm but also does benefits to making choices independently.
Currently
, the society is paying more attention to pedagogical methods,
therefore
what materials should be
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read
by
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students
become a controversial topic.
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Some
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people
reckon that
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reading
as their
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own
wishes is the optimal approach to improving their academic performances, while others believe that
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reading
what
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teachers
have assigned is expedient for them,
especially
when time
is limited
. As far as I
am concerned
, I
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agree
that it is better for
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students
to choose their
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reading
materials according to their
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own
demands
rather
than
being restricted
by
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teachers’
assignments and my arguments for this point
are listed
as follows.

One of the primary causes is that choosing
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books
based on their personal preference can trigger their real interests in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reading
.
As a result
, they may have higher efficiency to finish the job.
Additionally
, it
also
exaggerates their possibility of having deep understanding of
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books
. Imagine a scene like this, if a
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student
were asked
to
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read
something tedious, he or she would
probably
not have passion and energy to do
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so
, which exerts
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negative
influences on absorbing knowledge. Here is a case in point. Steve Jobs was
extremely
fond of electronic devices.
Hence
, driven by his enthusiasm for it, he
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read
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plenty
of
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books
about electronic engineering. What if he
was forced
to
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read
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books
beyond his area of interest,
for instance
, natural science or art? It was impossible for him to achieve the same extraordinary success he had done. This example delineates that academic interests play an
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important
role in enhance
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students’
performances,
thus
more freedom should
be authorized
to students.

In addition
, choosing
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reading
materials cultivates the ability to
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make
decisions
independently
among several options. More
concretely
, when
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students
are making their
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reading
lists, it is unavoidable for them to compare
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different
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books
and estimate which one has the higher value. If they
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make
their
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choice
without acquiring
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help
from
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teachers
, they become more experienced in tackling tasks
individually
.
For instance
, I
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make
acquaintance with a friend named Michael whose life is completely arranged by his parents. His parents
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make
almost all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
for him such as which city to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in and which career to specialize in.
Therefore
, his lack of experience in making
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choices
gives rise to his insufficiency in
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make
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choices
without resorting to others.

Admittedly
,
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some
individuals may argue that
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teachers
are
fully
fledged in choosing
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books
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so
that they are capable of designating a more suitable
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reading
list for
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students
. It is actually true that, to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent, it is essential for us to seek suggestions from experts in a certain field.
However
, if we are over-reliant on others’ assistance when we
are confronted
with adversity, it is likely that we fail to attain well-rounded abilities and tackle hardships by ourselves.

Generally
speaking, it is essential for
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students
to
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make
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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choices
to decide which
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books
to
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read
,
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because
making personal
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reading
list not
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only
generates
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students’
learning enthusiasm
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but
also
does benefits to making
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choices
independently
.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay students do reading by their own is as important as or more important than the reading teachers assigned v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
496 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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