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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The reading materials chosen by students on their own is more important than those assigned by their teachers. v.597

The reading materials chosen by students on their own is more important than those assigned by their teachers. v. 597
During academic study, we need read diversified materials to master the knowledge instructors taught in class, such as textbooks, papers, lecture notes, webpages or slides. Many students are used to the materials handed out by teachers, while others manage to search materials for themselves. As for me, I use both materials chosen by teacher and myself at the mean time. I hold a view that the materials chosen by teacher is no less important than ones chosen by students themselves. On the one hand, materials chosen by students is more customized to them. What students choose is definitely what they are interested in. They can find their passion in those materials so that they will more concentrate on them and enjoy reading. Take me as an example: I’m much more inclined to be diverted from that chosen by teacher but boring materials. In addition, we may be curious about some questions instructors don not cover in classes. That’s when we have to search for information by ourselves. Independently searching for academic materials is a basic skill for a self-motivated student who plans to devote himself to scientific career. I encourage them to find their way to fulfill their personalized curiosity. As Albert Einstein said, the important thing is not to stop questioning, curiosity has its own reason for existing. On the other hand, teachers is an expert in their field. They had a better judgment than students. They know what students really need to learn, so the materials chosen by them are all essence of this course. Those materials help us save much time, which we may spend on useless material. Moreover, many of them have been teaching a certain course for several years. During long-time teaching, materials may have been reviewed and filtered by them for many times. They are always removing old-fashioned materials and adding new ones, directed by the goal of the course, to maintain the high quality of their materials. The time a teacher spends on this activity is unimaginable for an individual who just study this course for a semester. To sum up, I think materials chosen by teachers and those chosen by students are equally important. They both has their own advantages over each other.
During academic study, we need read diversified
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materials
to master the knowledge instructors taught in
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class
, such as textbooks, papers, lecture notes,
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webpages
or slides.
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Many
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students
are
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used
to the
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materials
handed out by
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teachers
, while others manage to search
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materials
for themselves. As for me, I
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use
both
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materials
chosen by
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teacher
and myself at the mean
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time
. I hold a view that the
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materials
chosen by
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teacher
is no less
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important
than
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ones
chosen by
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students
themselves.

On the one hand,
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materials
chosen by
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students
is more customized to them. What
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students
choose is definitely what they
are interested
in. They can find their passion in those
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materials
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so
that they will more concentrate on them and enjoy reading. Take me as an example: I’m much more inclined to
be diverted
from that chosen by
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teacher
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but
boring
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materials
.
In addition
, we may be curious about
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some
questions instructors
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don not
cover in classes. That’s when we
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have to
search for information by ourselves.
Independently
searching for academic
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materials
is a basic
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skill
for a self-motivated
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student
who plans to devote himself to scientific career. I encourage them to find their way to fulfill their personalized curiosity. As Albert Einstein said, the
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important
thing is not to
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stop
questioning, curiosity has its
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own
reason for existing.

On the other hand
,
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teachers
is an expert in their field. They had a better judgment than
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students
. They know what
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students
really
need to learn,
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so
the
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materials
chosen by them are all essence of this
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course
. Those
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materials
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help
us save much
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time
, which we may spend on useless
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material
.
Moreover
,
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many
of them have been teaching a certain
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course
for several years. During long-time teaching,
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materials
may have
been reviewed
and filtered by them for
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many
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times
. They are always removing
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old
-fashioned
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materials
and adding new
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ones
, directed by the goal of the
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course
, to maintain the high quality of their
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materials
. The
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time
a
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teacher
spends on this activity is unimaginable for an individual who
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just
study this
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course
for a semester.

To sum up, I
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think
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materials
chosen by
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teachers
and those chosen by
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students
are
equally
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important
. They both
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has
their
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own
advantages over each other.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay The reading materials chosen by students on their own is more important than those assigned by their teachers. v. 597

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
371 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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