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Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than others sources such as internet and tv to what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than others sources such as internet and tv v. 1
Education plays a vital role in individuals life. Some people reckon that, pupils can gain more knowledge from academic topics with the help of tutor rather than from other sources like television and internet. I strongly agree with the given statement and would like to disclose my views in the forthcoming paragraphs. There are abundant of reasons that, students can gain more information from lessons, which are teaches by their trainers. The first key point probably that, students can give more concentration on their study due to the fear of punishment, which would be given to their tutors in the form of fine, if they give less focus on their study. Another thing may be that, teachers can make dull and boring subjects interesting by using new and simple method of teaching, it would ultimately help to create students interest in boring subjects such as Mathematics, science and History. The third main fact might be that, teachers can encourage to students to achieve good scores from their studies and they can also learn from their trainers how to compete with someones. As a result, it can be useful for their rest of life and also help to get good job. Apart from this, internet is an ocean of knowledge. There is no any authentication that, given information on the display of internet is true or false. That is why, learning from teacher is a best way instead of internet. The another obvious fact is probably that, there are numerous educative programs are telecasted on television. But students fail to understand some topic, which they can only understand with the help of tutors. In crux, it can be confidently conveyed that, learners can learn far more information from topics, if it is teaches by teachers instead of studying on internet or television by students
Education plays a vital role in individuals life.
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Some
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people
reckon that, pupils can gain more knowledge from academic topics with the
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help
of tutor
rather
than from other sources like television and internet. I
strongly
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agree
with the
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given
statement and would like to disclose my views in the forthcoming paragraphs.

There are abundant of reasons that,
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students
can gain more information from lessons, which are teaches by their trainers. The
first
key point
probably
that,
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students
can give more concentration on their study due to the fear of punishment, which would be
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given
to their tutors in the form of fine, if they give less focus on their study. Another thing may be that,
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teachers
can
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make
dull and boring subjects interesting by using new and simple method of teaching, it would
ultimately
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help
to create
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students
interest in boring subjects such as Mathematics, science and History.

The third main fact might be that,
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teachers
can encourage to
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students
to achieve
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good
scores from their
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studies and
they can
also
learn from their trainers how to compete with someones.
As a result
, it can be useful for their rest of life and
also
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help
to
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get
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good
job. Apart from this, internet is an ocean of knowledge. There is
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no
any authentication that,
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given
information on the display of internet is true or false.
That is
why, learning from
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teacher
is
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a
best way
instead
of internet. The another obvious fact is
probably
that, there are numerous educative programs are
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telecasted
on television.
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But
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students
fail to understand
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some
topic, which they can
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only
understand with the
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help
of tutors.

In crux, it can be
confidently
conveyed that, learners can learn far more information from topics, if it is teaches by
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teachers
instead
of studying on internet or television by
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students
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than others sources such as internet and tv v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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