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Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from other sources (such as the Internet and television). To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from other sources (such as the Internet and television). v. 1
It is undeniable that students can learn a lot from the Internet and TV and these have become an indispensable part of education, but I believe that teachers play a more significant role in the classroom. I believe that no subject can be covered by explaining from the teacher. A number of arguments surround my mind. On the one hand, when students learn lessons from their own teachers, there are two main advantages. Firstly, getting information in the classroom will result in deep knowledge. The reason is that all the subjects would be reviewed and the overall issues might be explained more by the teacher. That is how exactly students would reach to comprehensive responses. Secondly, school and university students will enjoy the educational environment. They can interact in groups by attending their classmates. That is why their motivation will be highly raised. On the other hand, those who study through other sources such as the Internet or television, there are both merits and drawbacks. Since they do not have to worry much about their time by going to and returning from school or university, they are able to economize. As well as they benefit more opportunity planning for their future. However, studying at home via the Internet or television has some disadvantages. They are unable to focus on their own lessons because of disturbance from other family members. Although, when they are watching television or surfing the webs, they would be encountered by irrelevant subjects. To conclude, it can be said, that no doubt TV and the Internet are very educative these days, but students definitely learn more from the teacher.
It is undeniable that
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students
can learn a lot from the Internet and TV and these have become an indispensable part of education,
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but
I believe that
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teachers
play a more significant role in the classroom. I believe that no subject can
be covered
by explaining from the
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teacher
. A number of arguments surround my mind.

On the one hand, when
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students
learn lessons from their
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own
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teachers
, there are two main advantages.
Firstly
, getting information in the classroom will result in deep knowledge. The reason is that all the subjects would
be reviewed
and the
overall
issues might be
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explained
more by the
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teacher
.
That is
how exactly
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students
would reach to comprehensive responses.
Secondly
, school and university
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students
will enjoy the educational environment. They can interact in groups by attending their classmates.
That is
why their motivation will be
highly
raised.

On the other hand
, those who study through other sources such as the Internet or television, there are both merits and drawbacks. Since they do not
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have to
worry much about their time by going to and returning from school or university, they are able to economize.
As well
as they benefit more opportunity planning for their future.
However
, studying at home via the Internet or television has
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some
disadvantages. They are unable to focus on their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
lessons
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because
of disturbance from other family members. Although, when they are watching television or surfing the webs, they would
be encountered
by irrelevant subjects.

To conclude
, it can
be said
, that no doubt TV and the Internet are
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very
educative these days,
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but
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students
definitely learn more from the
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teacher
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from other sources (such as the Internet and television). v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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