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Some students like classes where teachers lecture ( do all of talking) in class. Other students perfer classes where the students do some of the talking. Which type of class do you prefer? give specific reasons and details to support your choice. v.1

Some students like classes where teachers lecture ( do all of talking) in class. Other students perfer classes where the students do some of the talking. Which type of class do you prefer? give specific reasons and details to support your choice. v. 1
Teachers are a very important part of our lives. They affect our personality as well as our future. Their efforts are to make us a successful person in the world and to reap their work. Some students would prefer classes where teachers do all talking; Others wouldn' t prefer. In my view, I would believe that students do some of the talking is more beneficial for students for two important reasons. First, students are motivating when they participate in the talking. When students share with their teachers, they will strengthen in their personality to make decision. For example, when i was in pharmacy school, our teacher persuaded us to participate in the lecture to build up our personality. I was very afraid to share my opinion with others because i was very shy. After then, my professor asked me to prepare a subject about clinic pharmacy which was very interesting. In fact, first i was very scared to share with talking but after i prepared i felt i' m stronger. Consequently, i really become more confident about myself. This experience taught me that students have to share their ideas and do some talking with teacher to make them more confident and communicate with others. Second, students will encourage to learn more when students do some talking. The talking makes them to ask questions if they are confuse to some materials. Some times, they don' t understand something in text book so they ask questions to make them easy to understand. For instance, i read a book about how develop students to expand their knowledge. The book states that the teacher should make students to share and discuss with their teacher. This is extremely broad their information about the subject and make the student to think in a good manner. The book asserts that if the teacher don' t support students to talk, this will really lead to make the class boring. In contrast, if students ask questions lead to get more information and give them opportunity to learn something new with themselves. In addition, this will create a competition between students which is tremendous. This book helps me to understand that all teachers have to dedicate their class to students and make them add some information by participating in classes. In sum, all students have do some work in the class, Not only to motivate them but also to expand their knowledge by asking and sharing ideas with others. All teachers have to make some time to make discussion in the class. Moreover, give some extra credit to students who really prepare and ask a good question.
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do all talking; Others
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are motivating when they participate in the talking. When
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decision.
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share
with talking
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after
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prepared
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really
become more confident about myself. This experience taught me that
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students
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to
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them more confident and communicate with others.

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will encourage
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to learn
more when
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do
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talking. The talking
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questions
if they are
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materials.
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to
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read a
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about how develop
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students
to expand their knowledge. The
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states that the
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teacher
should
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make
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to
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and discuss with their
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teacher
. This is
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the
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boring.
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lead to
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more information and give them opportunity to learn something new with themselves.
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which is tremendous. This
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information by participating in classes.

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work in the
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to motivate them
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with others. All
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teachers
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discussion in the
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11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some students like classes where teachers lecture ( do all of talking) in class. Other students perfer classes where the students do some of the talking. Which type of class do you prefer? give specific reasons and details to support your choice. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
437 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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