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Students at schools and universities learn far more by lessons with their teachers compared to other sources (e. g. television, the Internet). Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Students at schools and universities learn far more by lessons with their teachers compared to other sources (e. g. television, the Internet). v. 1
Nowadays, There are several varieties of education methods which can employ to teach students. But some people believe that students can take in from tutors much better than new methods such as Online classes and Media. I, however, completely agree with the give statement on the basis of face-to-face connection and well-bing knowledge of the teachers. To begin with, the main reason is that direct conversation has always been one of the psychological methods to get more concentration on learning. To simply put, When the students take part at classes and talk with real people, teachers, they can encounter with problems that they didn't notice them. For example, take a problem solving by the teacher and the students as an example; students can find several solutions for the questions by solving with teachers or other student as well. Thus, The more participate in programs designed to teach by instructors, the more progress at lessons. Having said that, however, the face-to-face connection is not the only factor in this respect, another argument is that teachers are more likely to be updated than the virtual media sources. That is to say, teaching is the job of teachers, and providing that they want to be rewarded in their occupation, they should be more updates to lessons and new method to teach perfectly. For instance, they can speak several hours about the how pollution effect the life of human and how it can exist in biology programs, which they didn't involve more in the book. Hence, instructors utilize issues about the subject of lessons at classes that are very new and they are more touchable compared to books. To conclude, I personally take the view that under no circumstances is it acceptable to deny teachers' roles on progression of students. this is mainly because of the face to face relation between students and teachers and instill with state-of-the-art.
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which can employ to teach
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students
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some
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people
believe that
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students
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methods
such as Online classes and Media. I,
however
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agree
with the give statement on the basis of face-to-face connection and
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well-bing
knowledge of the teachers.

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begin
with, the main reason is that direct conversation has always been one of the psychological
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methods
to
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get
more concentration on learning. To
simply
put, When the
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students
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take part
at classes and talk with real
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people
,
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teachers
, they can encounter with problems that they didn't notice them.
For example
, take a problem solving by the
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teacher
and the
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students
as an example;
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students
can find several solutions for the questions by solving with
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teachers
or other
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student
as well
.
Thus
, The more participate in programs designed to teach by instructors, the more progress at lessons.

Having said that,
however
, the face-to-face connection is not the
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only
factor in this respect, another argument is that
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teachers
are more likely to
be updated
than the virtual media sources.
That is
to say, teaching is the job of
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teachers
, and providing that they want to
be rewarded
in their occupation, they should be more updates to lessons and new
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method
to teach
perfectly
.
For instance
, they can speak several hours about
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the how
pollution effect the life of human and how it can exist in biology programs, which they didn't involve more in the book.
Hence
, instructors utilize issues about the subject of lessons at classes that are
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very
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new and
they are more touchable compared to books.

To conclude
, I
personally
take the view that under no circumstances is it acceptable to deny teachers' roles on progression of
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students
.
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this
is
mainly
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of the face to face relation between
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students
and
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teachers
and instill with state-of-the-art.
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IELTS essay Students at schools and universities learn far more by lessons with their teachers compared to other sources (e. g. television, the Internet). v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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