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Some people think that it will be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Some people think that it will be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Some big Companies now prefer to station their headquarters in the Countryside. Some people are of the opinion that it is far beneficial for the company to do this, while others think otherwise. There are some upsides and downsides. In my opinion, I consider that moving to the rural areas offers significant merits like reduced cost than any drawbacks it might possess. Moving factories to the regional areas far from the developed cities has some pitfalls. Firstly, the distance becomes too far for the employees, which may tell on their productivity at work. For instance the traffic might affect the arrival time of an employee which can result to disorganized morning of that day. In addition, this can contribute to stressing the staff consequently affecting their overall health. However, these inconveniences can be curtailed if accommodation can be provided around their offices, this will curb the difficulties of getting to work. To buttress this, a staff lodge can be built and leased to staff at a discounted rate. Nevertheless, despite the negligible demerits above, there are some significant plus points. To start with, the location is more cost effective for the organization; the funds that are needed to get a good factory or large mass of land may only be enough to afford rentals in the big cities. In addition, the company can decide to hire employees within the locality which also contributes to the lesser expenditure for the company because these employees may be offered lesser wages. Furthermore, it is extremely beneficial to locate companies, especially manufacturing ones in the less developed areas because the wastes produced from the factory may have adverse effects on the inhabitants of the location, since urban area are more populated. More so, moving companies to the less developed parts of a state brings about development in the community. In conclusion, though people have different views about having a company in the regional area, I believe the merits greatly surpass any disadvantage like the far distance it might have
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Some
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big
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Companies
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now
prefer to station their headquarters in the Countryside.
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Some
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people
are of the opinion that it is
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far
beneficial for the
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company
to do this, while others
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think
otherwise
. There are
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some
upsides and downsides. In my opinion, I consider that moving to the rural
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areas
offers significant merits like
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reduced
cost than any drawbacks it might possess.

Moving factories to the regional
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areas
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far
from the developed cities has
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some
pitfalls.
Firstly
, the distance becomes too
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far
for the
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employees
, which may
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tell
on their productivity at work.
For instance
the traffic might affect the arrival time of an
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employee
which can result to disorganized morning of that day.
In addition
, this can contribute to stressing the staff
consequently
affecting their
overall
health.
However
, these inconveniences can
be curtailed
if accommodation can
be provided
around their offices, this will curb the difficulties of getting to work. To buttress this, a staff lodge can
be built
and leased to staff at a discounted rate.

Nevertheless
, despite the negligible demerits above, there are
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some
significant plus points. To
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start
with, the location is more cost effective for the organization; the funds that
are needed
to
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get
a
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good
factory or large mass of land may
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only
be
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enough
to afford rentals in the
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big
cities.
In addition
, the
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company
can decide to hire
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employees
within the locality which
also
contributes to the lesser expenditure for the
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company
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because
these
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employees
may
be offered
lesser wages.
Furthermore
, it is
extremely
beneficial to locate
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companies
,
especially
manufacturing ones in the less developed
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areas
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because
the wastes produced from the factory may have adverse effects on the inhabitants of the location, since urban
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area
are more populated. More
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so
, moving
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companies
to the less developed parts of a state brings about development in the community.

In conclusion
, though
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people
have
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different
views about having a
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company
in the regional
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area
, I believe the merits
greatly
surpass any disadvantage like the
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far
distance it might have
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that it will be better for large companies and industries to move to regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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