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Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree or agree with this view? v.4

It is believed by some individuals that higher Authorities should not finance for artwork And this money can be used for other sectors like transport, education and health departments etcetera. I disagree with this notion because art plays an important role in people's life therefore I will discuss the reasons supporting why art is vital. To embark one, art is in many forms like museums, theatre, paintings, sculpture etcetera. First and forcemost, in this hectic of life to mitigate their stress people tend to go for art and spend time to rejuvenate themselves. for example, this is proven in experiment that person who participate in act activities con lessen there boredom alle more happier than the others. moreover through art state can promote country’s culture in a form of museums and people con explore it. As, antique things are getting - extinct and vomit necessary OF save it to represent p+ to the Futulle genelations. Ewethermale, out also helps to boost tthe e comony nation because towrists come to see ong's culturel and the bay for it in form of ticket or entey fee. In addition there alle many 9 a mes covicbut, footbal and many masse also helps in statols economy as teams win for their Country. Additionally, the auth are often book funded and so, if money will use up in any other public sector them the aut will fail entirely. For instance, in India there ale mary historical forets but because of pook funding, these all getting spoiled: Consequently, to save these seeligious and neltorical monuments proper funding is essential. To conclude, although it is always a Contreeverial topic that white gover nance Should spend wealth but aut is extremely important for country. and funding is required to bereserve it. Also, out always becomete culture the people and their traditions.
It
is believed
by
some
individuals that higher Authorities should not finance for artwork

And this money can be
used
for

other sectors like transport, education

and health departments etcetera. I
disagree


with
this notion
because


art plays an
important
role in
people
's life
therefore
I will discuss the reasons supporting why
art
is vital.

To embark one,
art
is in
many
forms

like museums,
theatre
, paintings, sculpture

etcetera.
First
and
forcemost
, in this hectic of

life to mitigate their
stress
people
tend to

go for
art
and spend time to rejuvenate

themselves.
for
example, this is
proven


in
experiment that person who participate in

act activities con lessen there boredom

alle
more happier
than the others.
moreover
through
art
state can promote country’s culture in a form of museums and
people
con explore it. As, antique things are getting

-
extinct and vomit necessary

OF save it

to represent p+ to the
Futulle


genelations
.

Ewethermale
, out

also
helps
to boost
tthe
e
comony


nation
because
towrists
come
to
see
ong
's
culturel
and the bay for

it in form of ticket or
entey
fee. In
addition
there
alle
many
9 a mes
covicbut
,

footbal
and
many masse
also
helps
in

statols
economy as teams win for their

Country.
Additionally
, the auth

are
often
book funded and
so
, if money will

use
up in any other public sector them the

aut
will fail
entirely
.
For instance
, in India there

ale
mary
historical
forets
but
because


of
pook
funding, these all getting spoiled:
Consequently
, to save these
seeligious
and
neltorical
monuments proper funding

is essential.

To conclude
, although it is always a

Contreeverial
topic that white

gover nance
Should spend wealth
but


aut


is
extremely
important
for country.
and


funding

is required
to
bereserve
it.

Also
, out always

becomete


culture

the
people
and their traditions.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere.

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