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Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages? v.1

Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages? v. 1
Many travellers in the present times routinely visiting the climatically challenging area around the world as part of their travel bucket list. Although, they often struggle with the basic facilities and security, they will not only gain significant life experience, but they can feel the nature from a different perspective. This essay will discuss the positive and negative aspects of travelling to troublesome region. The greatest benefit of travelling to remote areas is that travellers will have life experience, in addition they can fancy the environment from the totally diverse mind set. Moreover, the people, places themselves under these unfavourable conditions because they will learn to survive in those extremely high or extremely low temperature conditions. For example, a documentary named as "Man vs Wild, which was aired on national geographic channel taught individual as how to cooked meal and response in case of emergency medical condition. The ultra challenging experiences are paradoxically the main advantages of travelling to difficult areas because they make you grow as a person. The main challenges that tourist will face while visiting will usually from basic real facilities and security. Furthermore, these differences can pose a massive obstacle for people because they require one to move beyond the familiar and into the unknown which can be often awkward and quite scary. For instance, While visiting to Dubai in hot and humid season, I often find myself in a challenging situation while roaming around the streets. Overall one have to be pre planned to cope with the dramatic living conditions. In Conclusion, travelling has become incredibly common. While no doubt experience of basic life necessities and security, it is in fact, these barriers that lead to main advantages of touring which is struggling with activity understanding and understand the nature from a different angle. As a contradiction of sorts, it is the hardship that ultimately makes the struggle more advantages than disadvantages.
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travellers
in the present times
routinely
visiting the
climatically
challenging area around the world as part of their travel bucket list. Although, they
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often
struggle with the basic facilities and security, they will not
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only
gain significant life
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experience
,
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but
they can feel the nature from a
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different
perspective. This essay will discuss the
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of
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travelling
to troublesome region.

The greatest benefit of
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travelling
to remote areas is that
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travellers
will have life
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experience
,
in addition
they can fancy the environment from the
totally
diverse mind set.
Moreover
, the
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people
, places themselves under these
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unfavourable
conditions
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because
they will learn to survive in those
extremely
high or
extremely
low temperature conditions.
For example
, a documentary named as
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"
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Man
vs Wild, which
was aired
on national geographic channel taught individual as how to cooked meal and response in case of emergency medical condition. The ultra challenging
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experiences
are
paradoxically
the main advantages of
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travelling
to difficult areas
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because
they
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make
you grow as a person.

The main challenges that tourist will face while visiting will
usually
from basic real facilities and security.
Furthermore
, these differences can pose a massive obstacle for
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people
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because
they require one to
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move
beyond the familiar and into the unknown which can be
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often
awkward and quite scary.
For instance
, While visiting to Dubai in hot and humid season, I
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often
find myself in a challenging situation while roaming around the streets.
Overall
one
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have to
be
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pre
planned to cope with the dramatic living conditions.

In Conclusion
,
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travelling
has become
incredibly
common. While no doubt
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experience
of basic life necessities and security, it is in fact, these barriers that lead to main advantages of touring which is struggling with activity understanding and understand the nature from a
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different
angle. As a contradiction of sorts, it is the hardship that
ultimately
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makes
the struggle more advantages than disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctica. What are the benefits and disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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