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Student should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass the exam, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Student should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass the exam, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. v. 3
The issue of school curriculum is highly debatable. It is true that, some people believed schools should not bother her students with the teaching of skills such as dressing or cooking, but rather focus its attention on equipping their pupils with basic academic knowledge that is required to perform exceedingly well in an examination. In my opinion, I ultimately think both academic and social abilities are required by students to function maximally in life hence they should be taught. This essay will discuss reasons to back up this view. On the one hand, most people think it is a waste of school time to teach school children how to cook or dress. In their defence, academic activities are cumbersome and requires the devotion of a lot of time and effort before students can eventually understand. The period that is supposed to be spent impacting such skills can be channeled towards helping students who have difficulty in understanding a particular subject. For example, there will be enough time for extra lessons in other to prepare them for exams. These instances are why people believe students should not be taught other things apart from the ones that are academic related. On the other hand, despite the reasons mentioned above, Learners should be impacted by the knowledge of both. This is because it will enable them strike an equilibrium between academic and other aspect of life. As much as making good grades at school is important, eating good food and appearing neatly is also crucial to their health. Teaching them about these things will increase their understanding of the role food play in keeping us healthy and also the significance of good dress sense. For instance, it will prepare and make them adapt perfectly to life after graduation. As a result, students should be how to pass exams as well as necessary knowledge require to function effectively and stay healthy. In conclusion, this essay argued that student while preparing students to pass their exams, basic skills such as cooking and dressing should also be taught because it is significant in helping the student maintain balance between academic work and social life.
The issue of
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school
curriculum is
highly
debatable. It is true that,
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some
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people
believed
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schools
should not bother her
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students
with the teaching of
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skills
such as dressing or cooking,
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but
rather
focus its attention on equipping their pupils with basic
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academic
knowledge that
is required
to perform
exceedingly
well in an examination. In my opinion, I
ultimately
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think
both
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academic
and social abilities
are required
by
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students
to function
maximally
in
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life
hence
they should
be taught
. This essay will discuss reasons to back up this view.

On the one hand, most
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people
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think
it is a waste of
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school
time to teach
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school
children how to cook or dress. In their
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defence
,
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academic
activities are cumbersome and requires the devotion of
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a lot of
time and effort
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before
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students
can
eventually
understand. The period that
is supposed
to
be spent
impacting such
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skills
can
be channeled
towards helping
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students
who have difficulty in understanding a particular subject.
For example
, there will be
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enough
time for extra lessons in
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other
to prepare them for exams. These instances are why
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people
believe
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students
should not
be taught
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other
things apart from the ones that are
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academic
related.

On the
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other
hand, despite the reasons mentioned above, Learners should
be impacted
by the knowledge of both. This is
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because
it will enable them strike an equilibrium between
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academic
and
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other
aspect of
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life
. As much as making
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good
grades at
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school
is
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important
, eating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
food and appearing
neatly
is
also
crucial to their health. Teaching them about these things will increase their understanding of the role food play in keeping us healthy and
also
the significance of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
dress sense.
For instance
, it will prepare and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them adapt
perfectly
to
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life
after graduation.
As a result
,
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students
should be how to pass exams
as well
as necessary knowledge require to function
effectively
and stay healthy.

In conclusion
, this essay argued that
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student
while preparing
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students
to pass their exams, basic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
such as cooking and dressing should
also
be taught
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is significant in helping the
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student
maintain balance between
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academic
work and social
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life
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Student should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass the exam, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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