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Some people think it more important to spend money on road and motorways than on public transport systems To what extend do you agree? v.1

Some people think it more important to spend money on road and motorways than on public transport systems v. 1
It's argued that more funds should allocate to the traffic infrastructure rather than public transport systems. Personally, I think both thoroughfare and public transport systems have vital roles to play in modern society, and therefore should be equal. On the other hand, better road quality increases the level of safe and reduces traffic congestion. It's reported that many accidents happen due to lack of adequate road infrastructure. In Southeast Asian countries such as Vietnam and Thailand, there is clear evidence of infrastructure deficit for example the number of road accidents has been ever-increasing because there are a lot of holes on the road's surface. The reason is that the government's spending be used to improve the quality of road systems in order to ensure the people's safety. In addition, wider roads and a larger number of highways can ease congestion in densely populated areas like Ho Chi Minh City or Bangkok, where vehicles are stuck on the road for up to 4 hours in peak. On the other hand, improved buses, trains and underground systems help protect the environment and benefit those who do not own personal vehicles. A bus can carry 20 people at a time, which means there are fewer than 20 vehicles on the street, resulting in carbon emissions reductions. For example, there is information that air quality in Vietnam is only 19% compared to 65% in Singapore, of which public transport is the main mode of transport. Moreover, for those who do not have personal vehicles, especially immigrants in big cities, buses and subways are the solution for their daily trips. This can be seen in Ho Chi Minh City, where hundreds of thousands of immigrants travel by bus daily. In conclusion, I beleve the govenment should expend money on not only road but also public transport systems
It's argued that more funds should allocate to the traffic infrastructure
rather
than
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public
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transport
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systems
.
Personally
, I
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think
both thoroughfare and
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public
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transport
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systems
have vital roles to play in modern society, and
therefore
should be equal.

On the other hand
, better
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road
quality increases the level of safe and
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reduces
traffic congestion. It's reported that
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many
accidents happen due to lack of adequate
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road
infrastructure. In Southeast Asian countries such as Vietnam and Thailand, there is
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clear
evidence of infrastructure deficit
for example
the number of
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road
accidents has been ever-increasing
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because
there are
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a lot of
holes on the road's surface. The reason is that the
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government
's spending be
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used
to
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improve
the quality of
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road
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systems
in order to ensure the
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people
's safety.
In addition
, wider
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roads
and a larger number of highways can
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ease
congestion in
densely
populated areas like Ho Chi Minh City or Bangkok, where
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vehicles
are stuck
on the
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road
for up to 4 hours in peak.

On the other hand
,
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improved
buses, trains and underground
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systems
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help
protect the environment and benefit those who do not
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own
personal
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vehicles
. A bus can carry 20
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people
at a time, which means there are fewer than 20
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vehicles
on the street, resulting in carbon emissions reductions.
For example
, there is information that air quality in Vietnam is
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only
19% compared to 65% in Singapore, of which
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public
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transport
is the main mode of
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transport
.
Moreover
, for those who do not have personal
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vehicles
,
especially
immigrants in
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big
cities, buses and subways are the solution for their daily trips. This can be
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seen
in Ho Chi Minh City, where hundreds of thousands of immigrants travel by bus daily.

In conclusion
, I
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beleve
the
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govenment
should expend money on not
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only
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road
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but
also
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public
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transport
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systems
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think it more important to spend money on road and motorways than on public transport systems v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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