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Student should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass the exam, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Student should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass the exam, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. v. 1
Education institutions make students dexterous and versatile in various skills. These include academic knowledge, language skills, ethical values and so on. Schools and other institutions play a paramount role in the personal development of a student. Nowadays, it is a debatable issue that whether schools should only be responsible for academic knowledge or other skills as well. I totally disagree with the statement that students should not be taught the skill for instance cooking or dressing in the school's curriculum. To embark on the justification for my notion, I believe that providing only bookish knowledge will not help them to grow personally. No doubt that they will learn more from books, but what will be the use of such knowledge if they are not able to implicate it practically. Schools should also include subjects like cooking, community helpers, music, dressing and many more so that students can learn about the real world. Moreover, gaining knowledge of academic theory might make them bookworms only and bring expertise with others will help them to gain self esteem, to learn the ethics of workplace etc. Skills like cooking and dressing are very important in our daily life, so learning these will make them independent. Academic theory is pivotal for testing a student and other skills are also significant for the overall development of a student. To sum up, I think if academic skills are important to pass an exam and to grow in a career, then skills like cooking and dressing are requisite for living and representative in the community.
Education institutions
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make
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students
dexterous and versatile in various
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skills
. These include
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academic
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knowledge
, language
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skills
, ethical values and
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so
on. Schools and
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other
institutions play a paramount role in the personal development of a
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student
. Nowadays, it is a debatable issue that whether schools should
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only
be responsible for
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academic
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knowledge
or
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other
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skills
as well
. I
totally
disagree with the statement that
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students
should not
be taught
the
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skill
for instance
cooking or
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dressing
in the school's curriculum.

To embark on the justification for my notion, I believe that providing
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only
bookish
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knowledge
will not
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help
them to grow
personally
. No doubt that they will learn more from books,
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but
what will be the
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use
of such
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knowledge
if they are not able to implicate it
practically
. Schools should
also
include subjects like cooking, community helpers, music,
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dressing
and
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many
more
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that
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students
can learn about the real world.

Moreover
, gaining
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knowledge
of
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academic
theory might
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make
them bookworms
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and bring expertise with others will
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them to gain
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self esteem
, to learn the ethics of workplace etc.
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like cooking and
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dressing
are
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very
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important
in our daily life,
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learning these will
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make
them independent.
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Academic
theory is pivotal for testing a
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student
and
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other
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skills
are
also
significant for the
overall
development of a student.

To sum up, I
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if
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academic
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skills
are
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important
to pass an exam and to grow in a career, then
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skills
like cooking and
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dressing
are requisite for living and representative in the community.
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IELTS essay Student should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass the exam, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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