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Stores should sell local food products and not imported food products. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Stores should sell local food products and not imported food products. v. 1
The sales of foreign food products by stores should be discouraged while locally produced ones ought to be patronized. I admit that purchasing native food products is healthier and more affordable. Perhaps one good reason why this should be promoted is that people get to eat healthy. Locally produced food products do not contain preservatives: artificial colouring, sweeteners and chemicals, which foreign manufacturers use to preserve their goods. In other words, individuals consuming them are not predisposed to certain health issues commonly found in our environment, these days: obesity, hypertension, diabetes. For instance, the incidence of cardiovascular disease has declined in the Nigerian health sector. This is because people now have a preference for organic diets. Therefore, consuming native, fresh products can make individuals live a good life. Another good reason to consider is that the products are affordable. When stores purchase at cheap rate from peasant farmers, they re-sell at considerable price to the populace. People from different class can afford to buy them comfortably, and would not have to spend so much on them. For instance, Shoprite a popular mall in Nigeria, sells fresh fruits at good rates. This can be attributed to the fact that these fruits they buy from local farmers in larger quantities, and at convenient price. More so, no tax is imposed on the produce and the price of sale would not be on the high side. In conclusion, if the sale of local produce in stores would benefit the people because it is less expensive and healthy, then this should be highly encouraged in our society.
The sales of foreign food
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products
by stores should
be discouraged
while
locally
produced ones ought to
be patronized
. I admit that purchasing native food
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products
is healthier and more affordable.

Perhaps one
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good
reason why this should
be promoted
is that
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people
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get
to eat healthy.
Locally
produced food
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products
do not contain preservatives: artificial
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colouring
, sweeteners and chemicals, which foreign manufacturers
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use
to preserve their
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goods
.
In other words
, individuals consuming them are not predisposed to certain health issues
commonly
found in our environment, these days: obesity, hypertension, diabetes.
For instance
, the incidence of cardiovascular disease has declined in the Nigerian health sector. This is
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because
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people
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now
have a preference for organic diets.
Therefore
, consuming native, fresh
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products
can
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make
individuals
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live
a
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good
life.

Another
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good
reason to consider is that the
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products
are affordable. When stores
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purchase
at
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cheap
rate from peasant farmers, they re-sell at considerable price to the populace.
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People
from
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different
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class
can afford to
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buy
them
comfortably
, and would not
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have to
spend
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so
much on them.
For instance
,
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Shoprite
a popular mall in Nigeria, sells fresh fruits at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
rates. This can
be attributed
to the fact that these fruits they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
from local farmers in larger quantities, and at convenient price. More
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, no tax
is imposed
on the produce and the price of sale would not be on the high side.

In conclusion
, if the sale of local produce in stores would benefit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is less expensive and healthy, then this should be
highly
encouraged in our society.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Stores should sell local food products and not imported food products. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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