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Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.6

Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. v. 6
In order to live a healthy life, many people consider exercise as the most important factor; however, others believe that a good nutrition plays a better role. In my opinion, both exercise and balanced diet are needed for a healthy living, as their effects are synergistic. On the one hand, Some people think that exercising is the key to health as it helps to reduce the risk of overweight. To illustrate, with frequent exertion, an excess fat stored in the body is burned down, thereby reducing the chances of obesity, which is a risk factor for certain diseases such as hypertension. This, in turn, reduces a lot of stress for an individual, relieves excessive spending for the government, and consequently, results in a healthy society with a greater workforce. On the other hand, others feel that an adequate nutrition is more important for a healthy life because it helps to build the immune system. In other words, having a balanced meal produces the necessary nutrients in the body including minerals and vitamins. These are the main sources of the catalysts and cofactors required in most biochemical pathways, such that a lack in any of them results in a disease. For instance, a deficiency in vitamin c produces a disease condition named Rickets. Finally, in my view, exercising regularly and eating well are both essential for a healthy living. For instance, having a good meal and living a sedentary lifestyle leads to an excessive fat accumulation and, thus, obesity. At the same time, exercising frequently without adequate diet would result to malnutrition, and subsequently, ill-health. Therefore, it is very important to eat well and also engage in some physical activity in order to maintain a better and a healthier life. In conclusion, despite people's varied opinions, I consider frequent exertion and a balanced diet, similarly important in providing a good health. Hence, both should be adopted as they act synergistically to ensure wellness
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life,
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people
consider exercise as the most
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factor;
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, others believe that a
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good
nutrition plays a better role. In my opinion, both exercise and balanced diet
are needed
for a
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healthy
living, as their effects are synergistic.

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people
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think
that exercising is the key to health as it
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helps
to
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reduce
the
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risk
of overweight. To illustrate, with frequent exertion, an excess
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fat
stored in the body
is burned
down, thereby reducing the chances of obesity, which is a
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risk
factor for certain diseases such as hypertension. This, in turn,
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reduces
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a lot of
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stress
for an individual, relieves excessive spending for the
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government
, and
consequently
, results in a
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healthy
society with a greater workforce.

On the
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other
hand, others feel that an adequate nutrition is more
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important
for a
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healthy
life
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because
it
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helps
to build the immune system. In
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words, having a balanced meal produces the necessary nutrients in the body including minerals and vitamins. These are the main sources of the catalysts and cofactors required in most biochemical pathways, such that a lack in any of them results in a disease.
For instance
, a deficiency in
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vitamin c
produces a disease condition named Rickets.

Finally
, in my view, exercising
regularly
and eating well are both essential for a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
living.
For instance
, having a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
meal and living a sedentary lifestyle leads to an excessive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fat
accumulation and,
thus
, obesity. At the same time, exercising
frequently
without adequate diet would result to malnutrition, and
subsequently
, ill-health.
Therefore
, it is
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very
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important
to eat well and
also
engage in
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some
physical activity in order to maintain a better and a healthier life.

In conclusion
, despite
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people
's varied opinions, I consider frequent exertion and a balanced diet,
similarly
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important
in providing a
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good
health.
Hence
, both should
be adopted
as they act
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synergistically
to ensure wellness
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IELTS essay Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
321 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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