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It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.1

It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. v. 1
At school, it is essential to put children with different talents and from varying family social origins together. This essay will explain the benefits and risks of such a diverse school concept. In my opinion, a variety of abilities and backgrounds can only be partially beneficial for all parties involved, since these varying conditions can be the cause of conflicts and misunderstandings. Firstly, one major benefit for children is diverse classes is the opportunity to broaden their horizons and benefit from each other. For instance, a child with a brilliant memory can help his or her classmates to learn vocabulary and motivate them. Additionally, school kids being from different social backgrounds have to learn to accept and tolerate each other when put together. This prepares them well for real life situations. What risks does a diverse school community have? A wide range of talents can also translate into children fighting with each other or being jealous of each other. Eventually, this might result in a toxic environment in which students will less or rare talents suffer. Moreover, it can be difficult to address the different needs of students. For example, children with good math skills might be bored in math classes, but fall behind in language courses. Furthermore, misunderstandings might predominate the interactions given that the juniors are from different social backgrounds. In conclusion, this essay discussed the advantages and disadvantages of a diverse school concept. Overall, I believe that such an environment is only partially beneficial for children due to the risks of misunderstandings and conflicts and varieties within a school should not be too extreme.
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, it is essential to put
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children
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talents and from varying family social origins together. This essay will
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the benefits and
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school
concept. In my opinion, a variety of abilities and backgrounds can
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only
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beneficial for all parties involved, since these varying conditions can be the cause of conflicts and misunderstandings.

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, one major benefit for
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children
is
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diverse
classes is the opportunity to broaden their horizons and benefit from each
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other
.
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, a child with a brilliant memory can
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help
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his or her
classmates to learn vocabulary and motivate them.
Additionally
,
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kids being from
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different
social backgrounds
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have to
learn to accept and tolerate each
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other
when put together. This prepares them well for real life situations.

What
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risks
does a
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diverse
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school
community have? A wide range of talents can
also
translate into
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children
fighting with each
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other
or being jealous of each
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other
.
Eventually
, this might result in a toxic environment in which students will less or rare talents suffer.
Moreover
, it can be difficult to address the
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different
needs of students.
For example
,
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children
with
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good
math
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skills
might
be bored
in math classes,
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but
fall behind in language courses.
Furthermore
, misunderstandings might predominate the interactions
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given
that the juniors are from
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different
social backgrounds.

In conclusion
, this essay discussed the advantages and disadvantages of a
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diverse
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school
concept.
Overall
, I believe that such an environment is
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only
partially
beneficial for
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children
due to the
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risks
of misunderstandings and conflicts and varieties within a
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school
should not be too extreme.
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You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS essay It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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