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TPO4 Q2Some people enjoy living in a location that has a warm climate all year. Other people like to live in a place where the seasons change. What type of climate do you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and example to support your opinion. v.1

TPO4 Q2Some people enjoy living in a location that has a warm climate all year. Other people like to live in a place where the seasons change. What type of climate do you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and example to support your opinion. v. 1
People throughout the world have different preferences with regard to the lifestyle. Many enjoy doing the same work through their entire life while others want a change. In my opinion, I think the change is important for a better lifestyle. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument, and then submit a plausible conclusion. On the one hand, people are reluctant to change because they have developed their skills in a particular area. Some employees, for example, do not welcome new processes and technology because they have already spent many years of their life learning about the existing processes. This shift makes them anxious and uncomfortable, therefore, they would prefer working on the same patterns. Moreover, when people get older, they become less adaptable which means they do not have the strength to cope up with the changing circumstances. Therefore, in this part of their age, they would like stability in their life. On the other hand, many people argue and I agree that change is crucial for personal development. Many thrilled and challenging people get bored of the same routine and they seek change in their chores. This gives them an opportunity to learn and explore about new things. These skills help them move forward in their lives. For example, 3 out of every 4 employees, working in the US, switch their jobs to learn new skills which allow them to apply and secure highly paid jobs. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I strongly believe that without embracing change, life is stagnant and to achieve more, one must accept it and see it as an opportunity for excellence.
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preferences with regard to the lifestyle.
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enjoy doing the same work through their entire life while others want a
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change
. In my opinion, I
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think
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important
for a better lifestyle. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument, and then submit a plausible conclusion.

On the one hand,
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people
are reluctant to
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change
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because
they have developed their
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skills
in a particular area.
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Some
employees,
for example
, do not welcome new processes and technology
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because
they have already spent
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many
years of their life learning about the existing processes. This shift
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makes
them anxious and uncomfortable,
therefore
, they would prefer working on the same patterns.
Moreover
, when
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people
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get
older, they become less adaptable which means they do not have the strength to cope up with the changing circumstances.
Therefore
, in this part of their age, they would like stability in their life.

On the other hand
,
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many
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people
argue and I
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that
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change
is crucial for personal development.
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thrilled and challenging
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people
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routine and
they seek
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change
in their chores. This gives them an opportunity to learn and explore about new things. These
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skills
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help
them
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move
forward in their
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lives
.
For example
, 3 out of every 4 employees, working in the US, switch their jobs to learn new
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skills
which
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allow
them to apply and secure
highly
paid jobs.

In conclusion
, while
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people
may vary in their opinion, I
strongly
believe that without embracing
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change
, life is stagnant and to achieve more, one
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must
accept it and
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see
it as an opportunity for excellence.
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IELTS essay TPO4 Q2Some people enjoy living in a location that has a warm climate all year. Other people like to live in a place where the seasons change. What type of climate do you prefer and why? Use specific reasons and example to support your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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