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a/d at universities and college, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. v.1

a/d at universities and college, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. v. 1
In many places around the world, young people are choosing not to vote. This results in them missing out on opportunities to have a say in decisions that will affect their futures and a possible solution is to make voting compulsory for all people who are eligible. When young people choose not to use their right to vote, they lose out on the possibility to influence decisions that will directly impact their futures. This is because the majority of votes are being cast by people from older generations and, therefore, the political decisions made reflect the wishes and interests of these older people. For example, many young people in the UK are frustrated that they chose not to vote in 2016 in the UK referendum on whether to leave the EU because of the direct impact this decision is having on their lives now. To solve this problem, states can make it obligatory for all eligible people to vote. This would mean that more citizens would register and vote during elections as they wouldn’t want to pay any fines incurred for not doing so. For instance, in Brazil voting is compulsory for all people aged 18 – 70 and because of this young people don’t neglect this right and the demographics of voters accurately represent the demographics of Brazilian citizens and thus ensures fairer representation for voters of all ages. In conclusion, young voters neglecting their right to vote means they do not have any input regarding political decisions that will affect their lives and one possible solution is to enforce voting by making it a legal obligation.
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places around the world,
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are choosing not to
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vote
. This results in them missing out on opportunities to have a say in
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decisions
that will affect their futures and a possible solution is to
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make
voting compulsory for all
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people
who are eligible.

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young
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people
choose not to
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use
their right to
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vote
, they lose out on the possibility to influence
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decisions
that will
directly
impact their futures. This is
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because
the majority of
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votes
are
being cast
by
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people
from older generations and,
therefore
, the political
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decisions
made reflect the wishes and interests of these older
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people
.
For example
,
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many
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young
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people
in the UK
are frustrated
that they chose not to
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vote
in 2016 in the UK referendum on whether to
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leave
the EU
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because
of the direct impact this
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decision
is having on their
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lives
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now
.

To solve this problem, states can
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make
it obligatory for all eligible
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people
to
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vote
. This would mean that more citizens would register and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vote
during elections as they wouldn’t want to pay any fines incurred for not doing
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so
.
For instance
, in Brazil voting is compulsory for all
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people
aged 18 – 70 and
because of this
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young
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people
don’t neglect this right and the demographics of voters
accurately
represent the demographics of Brazilian citizens and
thus
ensures fairer representation for voters of all ages.

In conclusion
,
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young
voters neglecting their right to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
vote
means they do not have any input regarding political
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
that will affect their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
and one possible solution is to enforce voting by making it a legal obligation.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay a/d at universities and college, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. use specific reasons and examples to support your answers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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