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Sport can be used to bring people from different cultures together. It helps to foster friendliness between nations, especially when sport-based tournaments or competitions are held. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.1

Sport can be used to bring people from different cultures together. It helps to foster friendliness between nations, especially when sport-based tournaments or competitions are held. with this statement. v. 1
Not only does sport have a positive influence on individuals' physical and mental health, it also creates an environment where people with diverse cultural backgrounds get together. For this reason, it is said that international sports events such as the Olympics and world cups assist in fostering a friendship between countries. In fact, I totally agree with the above statement as it involves government inputs to host or participate in such sports competitions and creates an opportunity to experience diverse cultures by promoting tourism. International sports competitions generally require a great amount of money and time from both hosting and participating countries. Before the event, the representatives of each country attend meetings and work together towards the shared goal, which is to make the event successful. This process creates a chance to share opinions and consequently promote a cooperation between nations. A good illustration of this is the long-lasting relationship between a small village in Japan and an African country, which was bonded via a football world cup in the past. The connection between countries will be stronger and deeper when they share the same interest such as sports. On top of the above mentioned point, a large sport event promotes tourism as people around the world travel to go to the game. Although some people argue that cultural differences and existing language barriers may contribute to a conflict owing to the difficulty in understanding different cultures, I believe that people appreciate the unique experience while travelling. For example, a hosting country makes an effort in accommodating foreign tourists by making English menu available at restaurants, which makes it easier for foreigners to try different food. As a result, not only does tourists enjoy attending the sports event, they are also entertained by food and culture of other countries. Through these unique experiences, people will be interested in leaning another culture and the history of different nations. Thus, sports can foster friendliness between countries. In conclusion, although international sports events require a great effort from each participating country, it creates an opportunity to exchange cultures and forms a strong relationship between nations through the process of facilitating successful events.
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have a
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positive
influence on individuals' physical and mental health, it
also
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creates
an environment where
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people
with diverse cultural backgrounds
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get
together.
For this reason
, it
is said
that international
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sports
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events
such as the Olympics and world cups assist in fostering a friendship between
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countries
. In fact, I
totally
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agree
with the above statement as it involves
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government
inputs to host or participate in such
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sports
competitions and
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creates
an opportunity to experience diverse
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cultures
by promoting tourism.

International
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sports
competitions
generally
require a great amount of money and time from both hosting and participating
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countries
.
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Before
the
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event
, the representatives of each
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country
attend meetings and work together towards the shared goal, which is to
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make
the
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event
successful. This process
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creates
a chance to share opinions and
consequently
promote a cooperation between nations. A
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good
illustration of this is the long-lasting relationship between a
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small
village in Japan and an African
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country
, which
was bonded
via a football world cup in the past. The
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connection between
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countries
will be stronger and deeper when they share the same interest such as sports.

On top of the above mentioned point, a large
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sport
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event
promotes tourism as
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people
around the world travel to go to the game. Although
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some
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people
argue that cultural differences and existing language barriers may contribute to a conflict owing to the difficulty in understanding
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different
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cultures
, I believe that
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people
appreciate the unique experience while travelling.
For example
, a hosting
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country
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makes
an effort in accommodating foreign tourists by making English menu available at restaurants, which
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makes
it easier for foreigners to try
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different
food.
As a result
, not
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only
does tourists enjoy attending the
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sports
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event
, they are
also
entertained by food and
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culture
of other
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countries
. Through these unique experiences,
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people
will
be interested
in leaning another
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culture
and the history of
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different
nations.
Thus
,
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sports
can foster friendliness between countries.

In conclusion
, although international
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sports
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events
require a great effort from each participating
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country
, it
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creates
an opportunity to exchange
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cultures
and forms a strong relationship between nations through the process of facilitating successful
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events
.
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IELTS essay Sport can be used to bring people from different cultures together. It helps to foster friendliness between nations, especially when sport-based tournaments or competitions are held. with this statement. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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