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“Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming? " v.11

“Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming? " v. 11
Since the beginning of the twenty first century, the world, especially wealthy nations have faced a plenty of environmental issues, such as pollution, depletion of the ozone layer and the global warming. The effects of these issues on human lives are very dangerous. So, it is mandatory to implement some solutions to reduce it. This essay is an attempt to elaborate several ways to reduce the global warming effect and save the earth. To begin with, the primary cause of the global warming is the emission of harmful gases, such as carbon dioxide and nitrous oxide, which are responsible to increase the temperature of the earth's surface. A recent study has shown that, ninety percent of CO2 gas has been emitted through the burning of fossil fuels. Therefore, governments should encourage people to reduce the use of non-renewable energy and increase the use of the public transportation. Additionally, the public transportation facilities should be improved. So that, people get encouraged to use it. Moreover, public awareness is also essential to save the environment. The authority can organise campaigns to reduce the deforestation and increase the afforestation. For example, a campaign for sapling per head. In addition, people should be aware about the use of renewable energy, such as solar power, wind power, nuclear energy. As the cost of the basic installation of renewable energy is higher than that of the non-renewable power, the government should provide the loan and subsidies to set it up. To conclude, people in the developed countries live very fast life. Consequently, they end up using renewable resources. Therefore, it is the responsibility of the government to make people aware of the benefits of renewable energy and motivate the people to use it.
Since the beginning of the twenty
first
century, the world,
especially
wealthy nations have faced a
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plenty
of environmental issues, such as pollution, depletion of the ozone layer and the global warming. The effects of these issues on human
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lives
are
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very
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dangerous
.
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So
, it is mandatory to implement
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some
solutions to
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reduce
it. This essay is an attempt to elaborate several ways to
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reduce
the global warming effect and save the earth.

To
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begin
with, the primary cause of the global warming is the emission of harmful gases, such as carbon dioxide and nitrous oxide, which are responsible to increase the temperature of the earth's surface. A recent study has shown that, ninety percent of CO2 gas has
been emitted
through the burning of fossil fuels.
Therefore
,
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governments
should encourage
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people
to
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reduce
the
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use
of non-renewable
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energy
and increase the
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use
of the public transportation.
Additionally
, the public transportation facilities should be
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improved
.
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So
that,
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people
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get
encouraged to
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use
it.

Moreover
, public awareness is
also
essential to save the environment. The authority can
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organise
campaigns to
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reduce
the deforestation and increase the afforestation.
For example
, a campaign for sapling per head.
In addition
,
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people
should be aware about the
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use
of
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renewable
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energy
, such as solar power, wind power, nuclear
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energy
. As the cost of the basic installation of
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renewable
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energy
is higher than that of the non-renewable power, the
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government
should provide the loan and subsidies to set it up.

To conclude
,
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people
in the
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developed countries
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live
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very
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fast
life.
Consequently
, they
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end
up using
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renewable
resources.
Therefore
, it is the responsibility of the
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government
to
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make
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people
aware of the benefits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
renewable
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energy
and motivate the
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people
to
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use
it.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay “Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming? " v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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