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speaking part 1: EntertainmentDo you prefer relaxing at home or going out in the evening? [Why? ]When you go out for an evening, what do you like to do? How popular is this with other people in your country? Is there any kind of entertainment you do not like? v.1

speaking part 1: EntertainmentDo you prefer relaxing at home or going out in the evening? [Why? ]When you go out for an evening, what do you like to do? How popular is this with other people in your country? Is there any kind of entertainment you do not like? v. 1
Nowadays, with the development of modern technology, interacting with other people on the internet become extremely popular. Some people suppose that online communication will be widely used in today's society and will be able to replace that traditional way that is face to face communication. In my opinion, I completely see eye to eye with this view. On the one side, there are many positive effects on enhancing the number of people using the network to communicate. This way is really easy for people when they want to communicate with others. They just need a smartphone or a networked computer to talk to friends wherever they are. For example, Facebook is the largest website today, there are many people use Facebook as a tool to communicate with friends and acquaintances and share their feelings or work. Moreover, communication through the network helps users save time and money. For instance, before, in order to talk to relationships or friends living abroad, people had to make international calls at an extremely high cost. On the other hands, face to face communication can bring significant benefits to everyone. Firstly, it helps people to be closer and understand each other better. Secondly, when people communicate directly with each other they can use body language to enhance interaction and strengthen relationships. In addition, people feel safer when choosing this traditional communication. In conclusion, while online communication has some positively affected to people, I strongly believe that face-to-face contact cannot be removed completely because of some of the drawbacks mentioned above.
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body language to enhance interaction and strengthen relationships.
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feel safer when choosing this traditional communication.

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, while online
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IELTS essay speaking part 1: EntertainmentDo you prefer relaxing at home or going out in the evening? [Why? ]When you go out for an evening, what do you like to do? How popular is this with other people in your country? Is there any kind of entertainment you do not like? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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