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Answer the questions: Speaking part 1Where are you from? Are you a student, or do you have a job? What do you study? / What is your job? Do you enjoy your job / your studies? v.1

Answer the questions: Speaking part 1Where are you from? Are you a student, or do you have a job? What do you study? / What is your job? Do you enjoy your job / your studies? v. 1
Nowadays the market is dominated by large business corporations. Such companies can afford to allocate enormous amounts of money for advertisement campaigns in order to attract customers. This essay will discuss the main problems caused by the aggressive marketing strategies used by large corporations, including the bankruptcy of small businesses and the dying-out of local communities. However, local businesses can generate interest in their goods by finding their unique niche and emphasizing on the environmental benefits. The oligopoly in the advertisement field has caused several problems for local companies. First of all, as a result of the majority of people being attracted to products of large corporations, many local businesses is neglected. As a result, many local shops have insignificant revenue and ultimately cease to exist. Consequently, the closure of local businesses also greatly affects local communities. According to Jane Jacobs, the author of a well-known book on city life, in any area, after the arrival of a big corporation, participation in local charities, churches, campaign groups and even voting declines sharply. Communities are created by myriad small daily encounters: getting cooking tips from the greengrocer, hearing about a job from the butcher, recommending a good plumber at the bakery, exchanging opinions in the pub. There are two methods, by following which local businesses will be able to attract more customers. Firstly, the key to success is to carve out a niche which makes your business unique as most big business can’t innovate and respond to new market requirement as fast as a well-managed small business focused on its customer can. Moreover, local businesses, unlike large corporations can point out their environmental benefits. It is well-known that they have a lower carbon footprint as they don’t have to deliver products or receive deliveries beyond their local community. In conclusion, not being able to compete with big businesses in terms of advertising has brought a lot of problems for local small companies, such as the lack of customers and consequently having to close. Nevertheless, local businesses can arouse more interest in their products by proving unique goods and emphasizing on being ecologically friendly.
Nowadays the market
is dominated
by
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large
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business
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corporations
. Such
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companies
can afford to allocate enormous amounts of money for advertisement campaigns in order to attract
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customers
. This essay will discuss the main problems caused by the aggressive marketing strategies
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used
by
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large
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corporations
, including the bankruptcy of
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small
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businesses
and the dying-out of
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local
communities.
However
,
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local
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businesses
can generate interest in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
by finding their unique niche and emphasizing on the environmental benefits.

The
oligopoly
in the advertisement field has caused several problems for
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local
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companies
.
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First of all
,
as a result
of the majority of
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people
being attracted
to products of
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large
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corporations
,
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many
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local
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businesses
is neglected
.
As a result
,
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many
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local
shops have insignificant revenue and
ultimately
cease to exist.
Consequently
, the closure of
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local
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businesses
also
greatly
affects
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local
communities. According to Jane Jacobs, the author of a well-known book on city life, in any area, after the arrival of a
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big
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corporation
, participation in
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local
charities, churches, campaign groups and even voting declines
sharply
. Communities
are created
by myriad
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small
daily encounters: getting cooking tips from the greengrocer, hearing about a job from the butcher, recommending a
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good
plumber at the bakery, exchanging opinions in the pub.

There are two methods, by following which
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local
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businesses
will be able to attract more
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customers
.
Firstly
, the key to success is to carve out a niche which
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makes
your
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business
unique as most
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big
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business
can’t innovate and respond to new market requirement as
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fast
as a well-managed
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small
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business
focused on its
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customer
can.
Moreover
,
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local
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businesses
, unlike
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large
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corporations
can point out their environmental benefits. It is well-known that they have a lower carbon footprint as they don’t
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have to
deliver products or receive deliveries beyond their
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local
community.

In conclusion
, not being able to compete with
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big
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businesses
in terms of advertising has brought
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a lot of
problems for
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local
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small
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
, such as the lack of
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customers
and
consequently
having to close.
Nevertheless
,
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local
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businesses
can arouse more interest in their products by proving unique
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
and emphasizing on being
ecologically
friendly.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Answer the questions: Speaking part 1Where are you from? Are you a student, or do you have a job? What do you study? / What is your job? Do you enjoy your job / your studies? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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