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Some people like to listen to classical music; others like to listen to popular music (including popular songs). Which kind of music do you prefer? v.2

Some people like to listen to classical music; others like to listen to popular music (including popular songs). Which kind of music do you prefer? v. 2
Generally, music has a long history and it had been in lives of all people in different ways. It influences us in many occasions whether by its rhythm or its lyrics. Music developed like any other things in humans’ life continuously. People listen to different sorts of music that could be traditional classical ones or the popular modern music records which were created more recently. Personally, I like to listen to classical tracks more than these new music records due to some reasons that I have for myself. First, classical music rhythm and tempo make me feel a special kind of freedom and peacefulness that I have never experienced it in any other activity. Classical music relations with my life style and earlier confrontations can also be involved in my current decision too, since I had good memories with some of these memorable and historical tracks specifically. For example, I remember one distinctive memory about this matter. I was 18 and I should prepare myself for the last test strongly. However, in the night before the exam day I cannot go to sleep and I tried every solution to solve that annoying problem. At last, a sound track from cinema paradise helped me to sleep easily. These effect continue its path during my life until today. Secondly, we should consider the fact that classical music provides us with a natural and instrumental sound which is not altered by any sound device totally. The popular tracks and records which young people love to listen to them everywhere are mostly changed and enhanced with a lot of modern devices that kills the genuine feeling in its listener unfortunately. It feels good if you hear some minor false notes in a long track. But when you produce the sound with artificial machines and fixing the notes places, the last music outcome will not give you the taste of a memorable sound and it vanishes from your mind quickly. Last but not least, I believe lyrics can be placed and coördinated with classical music better than pop arts. I think a person who listens to a sound track can understand the message which was put inside a classical music easier than the pop or rap records normally, because they present a more coherent bond between lyrics and the music rhythm. In conclusion, music is one of the special experiences that people have in their lives. They connect with different music styles after they listen to them. Some prefer to listen to the old-fashioned classical tracks, while some others enjoy listening to more active modern pop songs. The important issue is the music itself which we must protect it from misleading.
Generally
,
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music
has a long history and it had been in
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lives
of all
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people
in
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different
ways. It influences us in
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many
occasions whether by its rhythm or its lyrics.
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Music
developed like any other things in humans’ life
continuously
.
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People
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listen
to
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different
sorts of
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music
that could be traditional
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classical
ones or the popular modern
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music
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records
which
were created
more recently.
Personally
, I like to
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listen
to
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classical
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tracks
more than these new
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music
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records
due to
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some
reasons that I have for myself.

First
,
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classical
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music
rhythm and tempo
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make
me feel a special kind of freedom and peacefulness that I have never experienced it in any other activity.
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Classical
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music
relations with my life style and earlier confrontations can
also
be involved
in my
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current
decision too, since I had
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good
memories with
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some
of these memorable and historical
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tracks
specifically
.
For example
, I remember one distinctive memory about this matter. I was 18 and I should prepare myself for the last
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test
strongly
.
However
, in the night
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before
the exam day I cannot go to sleep and I tried every solution to solve that annoying problem. At last, a
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sound
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track
from cinema paradise
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helped
me to sleep
easily
. These effect continue its path during my life until
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today
.

Secondly
, we should consider the fact that
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classical
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music
provides us with a natural and instrumental
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sound
which is not altered by any
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sound
device
totally
. The popular
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tracks
and
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records
which young
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people
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love
to
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listen
to them everywhere are
mostly
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changed
and enhanced with
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a lot of
modern devices that kills the genuine feeling in its listener unfortunately. It feels
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good
if you hear
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some
minor false notes in a long
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track
.
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But
when you produce the
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sound
with artificial machines and fixing the notes places, the last
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music
outcome will not give you the taste of a memorable
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sound
and it vanishes from your mind
quickly
.

Last
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but
not least, I believe lyrics can
be placed
and
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coördinated
with
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classical
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music
better than pop arts. I
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think
a person who
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listens
to a
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sound
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track
can understand the message which
was put
inside a
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classical
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music
easier than the pop or rap
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records
normally
,
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because
they present a more coherent bond between lyrics and the
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music
rhythm.

In conclusion
,
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music
is one of the special experiences that
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people
have in their
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lives
. They connect with
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different
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music
styles after they
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listen
to them.
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Some
prefer to
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listen
to the
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old
-fashioned
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classical
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tracks
, while
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some
others enjoy listening to more active modern pop songs. The
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important
issue is the
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music
itself which we
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must
protect it from misleading.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
The most intimate temper of a people, its deepest soul, is above all in its language.
Jules Michelet

IELTS essay Some people like to listen to classical music; others like to listen to popular music (including popular songs). Which kind of music do you prefer? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
446 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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