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Speak about your favourite newspaperName and how it is published When you read it What you like in it Do you have any suggestions for it? v.1

Speak about your favourite newspaperName and how it is published When you read it What you like in it Do you have any suggestions for it? v. 1
There is no doubt these days the crimes are playing a major problem in our lives. However the question: Does the prison period have a positive relationship with the instance of the crimes? Is considered one of the most controversial issues today. In this essay I am going to examine both viewpoints. On one side of the argument there are people who argued that the benefits considerably outweigh the disadvantages. In main reason for believing this is the prison nowadays has different rehabilitation programs which help in to transform the people. Orange is the new black program show, for example, it shows different kinds of therapeutic sessions there were using it during the prison period to change the mindset of the crime person. Moreover, It is possible to say that when the crimes people staying a long time in prison this will contribute a sense of punishment and feeling lonely. A good illustration of this the statistic showed a high percentage of cases treated by sense of punishment not the actual harmed punishment. On the other hand, It is also possible to consider it with the opposing case. The other argued that long time might not decrease the crime they believe that because of when they are staying a long time in prison, they will loss all the friendship they could have and once again if they did not have those therapy sessions they absolutely will feel the nation against them and they will never change their crimes attitude. In addition, the others normal people their eye view of the abnormal people such as crime people also will affect their attitude. We have seen that there are no easy answers for this question. On balance, however, I tend to believe that the best way is to have a long period of healing sessions during the period of prison.
There is no doubt these days the
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crimes
are playing a major problem in our
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lives
.
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However
the question: Does the
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prison
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period
have a
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positive
relationship with the instance of the
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crimes
?
Is considered
one of the most controversial issues
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today
. In this essay I am going to examine both viewpoints.

On one side of the argument there are
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people
who argued that the benefits
considerably
outweigh the disadvantages. In main reason for believing this is the
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prison
nowadays has
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different
rehabilitation programs which
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help
in to transform the
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people
. Orange is the new black program
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show
,
for example
, it
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shows
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different
kinds of therapeutic sessions there were using it during the
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prison
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period
to
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change
the mindset of the
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crime
person.
Moreover
, It is possible to say that when the
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crimes
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people
staying a
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long
time in
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prison
this will contribute a sense of punishment and feeling lonely. A
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good
illustration of this the statistic
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showed
a high percentage of cases treated by sense of punishment not the actual harmed punishment.

On the other hand
, It is
also
possible to consider it with the opposing case. The other argued that
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long
time might not decrease the
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crime
they believe that
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because
of when they are staying a
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long
time in
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prison
, they will
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loss
all the friendship they could have and once again if they did not have those therapy sessions they
absolutely
will feel the nation against
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them and
they will never
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change
their
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crimes
attitude.
In addition
, the others normal
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people
their eye view of the abnormal
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people
such as
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crime
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people
also
will affect their attitude.

We have
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seen
that there are no easy answers for this question. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that the best way is to have a
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long
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period
of healing sessions during the
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period
of
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prison
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Speak about your favourite newspaperName and how it is published When you read it What you like in it Do you have any suggestions for it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
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