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43. What Is Your Favourite Form Of Transportation For Getting Around? Describe It AndExplain Why It Is Your Favourite Means Of Transportation. v.1

43. What Is Your Favourite Form Of Transportation For Getting Around? Describe It AndExplain Why It Is Your Favourite Means Of Transportation. v. 1
Education is a weapon by which we can win the world. Education plays an important role in everyone's development. Therefore, parents want that a good education is provided to their children and help them in their future. Parents choose between state run and private schools which is best for their own characteristics. To begin with, most of the parents choose the state run school because they think that our children can get better facilities there like scholarship, free books and etcetera. Many students get scholarship due to their great performance and now they are studying in abroad. Moreover, state run schools accept all types of students. In these schools, children can get admission without any entrance test. Many state competitions are organised by these schools so students can get a chance to play at the state level. On the other hand, other parents think that private schools are best because they provide so many facilities like English medium, activities like, music, arts and etcetera. In private school rules and discipline is more strict than government schools. Moreover, in private school students get the admission by test. They are selected on the base of their test. By this students know about their ability and gain self confidence. Furthermore, private schools provide computer and science labs to help students in their study. In the conclusion, both schools have their own importance. However, state run schools are more economic than private schools. So everyone can not afford private schools. For them state run schools are best.
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important
role in everyone's development.
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parents
want that a
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good
education
is provided
to their children and
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help
them in their future.
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choose between
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state
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run
and
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private
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schools
which is best for their
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own
characteristics.

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with, most of the
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parents
choose the
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state
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run
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school
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because
they
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think
that our children can
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get
better facilities there like scholarship, free books and etcetera.
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Many
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students
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get
scholarship due to their great performance and
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now
they are studying in abroad.
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,
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state
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run
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schools
accept all types of
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students
. In these
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schools
, children can
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get
admission without any entrance
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test
.
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Many
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state
competitions are
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organised
by these
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schools
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so
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students
can
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get
a chance to play at the
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state
level.

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, other
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parents
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think
that
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private
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schools
are best
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because
they provide
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so
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many
facilities like English medium, activities like, music, arts and etcetera. In
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private
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school
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rules
and discipline is
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more strict
than
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government
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schools
.
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, in
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private
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school
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students
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get
the admission by
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test
. They
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on the base of their
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test
. By
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this
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students
know about their ability and gain
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self confidence
.
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,
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private
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schools
provide computer and science labs to
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help
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students
in their study.

In the conclusion, both
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schools
have their
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own
importance.
However
,
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state
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run
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schools
are more economic than
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private
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schools
.
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So
everyone can not afford
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private
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schools
. For them
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state
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run
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schools
are best.
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The limits of my language are the limits of my world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay 43. What Is Your Favourite Form Of Transportation For Getting Around? Describe It AndExplain Why It Is Your Favourite Means Of Transportation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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